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to tell him goodbye.

Lost…

In a hole –within myself
Ripping at bloodstained walls, crippling

Forgotten…
                        His voice,

Full of regrets.

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  • Darianna
    February 7, 2008

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    I really like this. You've been quite creative with your layout and it adds to the whole feel of the piece. Certainly helps me to read it as it's supposed to be read.

    I like how you've written that you are lost in a hole within...it does feel like that when you are the one saying the goodbye. Having to listen to the other saying how they want to try and carry on, and how sorry they are for whatever went on...that's hard and it's easy to just withdraw to avoid it.

    Thankyou for entering my contest, goodluck,

    Dari xxx