mirrored
skin quivers
in pink flush-
presses hard
to glass
slips
in condensation
sweats
and shivers
above the vent's cool air
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a faucet turns
hot on high
again
water splashes flesh
fills this room
with steam.
mirrored
skin quivers
slips
sweats
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a faucet turns
hot on high
fills this room
In a list
A contest entry
- anything under 15 lines by tara wilson.
600 points, ended February 4, 2008, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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A captivating poem with great imagery and verbiage. Excellent.
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the title caught my eye. my boyfriend was an ass today. he needs to rinse clean his words. i like this poem. i love the title.
so... a hot shower rinses a day's words? maybe... or just sitting in the bathroom as it steams?
don't know how to take it... but i know i liked it very much so!
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nice poem,best wishes in the contest
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oops, forgot these :)
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I love the title, and how it aptly reflects the content of the piece. Wonderful!
Best wishes in the contest,
Stacy
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excellent...love the cleansing feel to this. Imagery is superb
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i love this type of poetry...i truly do.
so much said in so few words...perfect.
Love, Lane
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i like the rinse and cleaning imagery that begets a blush of renewl. i'm not sure how others read it, but i feel like there is a sublimation from ice (glass) to steam. with a condensation (sweats and shivers)of the poet's flesh in between. give the faucet another turn . . . -redphish
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I really feel a sense of those words in the room with you, until you turn on the tap, and I really feel them disappear...I really like this..it is relaxing, and I love showers, so good choice herelol...wonderful imagery and mood, thank you for your entry..
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fabulous poem my doll. You're a wonderful poet damnit and I'm very sorry that I have been lacking in the comment area.
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sometimes you scare me... I was writing along these same lines, not entered anywhere, but shite...
weird. So of course I loved this.
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Sheesh, Woman. Yeahhh, I'm enjoyin' the how-to's, for sure. Good luck in Tara's contest, my Friend. Wanda
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