slicing with precision, parting tissue
razor edged pain that never leaves
even when it fades the memory lingers
just below the surface of my mind
a feeling, like the sharpest knife
digging deep to reach the inner me
ripping out the love I have for you
shredding thoughts of what we shared
casting them to be taken on the wind
scattered, like my broken dreams
tears shed and dried upon my cheeks
dry, aching throat and burning eyes
nothing can compare to how it feels
to have your heart ripped from you
torn by indifference and your sweet lies
but time heals and just like paper cuts
one day my broken heart will mend
Author notes
I was talking with a friend about paper cuts and the pain they cause, he dared me to write about it and I did; nothing more to say on the subject...
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A contest entry
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u have failed to read the rules of my contest, or even the prompt. So plz dont be surprised when I do this.......
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this is fantastic!! really well expressed feelings and a great inspiration. I love the last lines!!
thanks so much for your entry,
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I loved the last stanza! This was such a lovely poem! Thank you for entering! Becks
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this is good and I liked it
keep up the good work and I
wish you the best in this
I am typing this with my own
paper cut finger
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My daughter cut herself all time. One day we struck a bargin, she hasn't cut herself in over a year so proud of her. This poem reminded me of her. Thank you for sharing. ~Sie
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i gues thet is wher teh ol sayn cut like a knife com from. but teh ones to you heart cut way deepr then any knife evr can caus they slice rigt throu you soul.
at leas paper cut heal.
i hope this one heal fo you caus i kno jus how deep these wound can be
bel ange
jan ♥
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wonderful
wonderfully written,I loved it from start to finish, Eddy
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Oh, Margaret, this is exquisite my dear, simply exquisite.
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i like it. very emotional and real. i really like your write.
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Very nice piece, very strong and moving. "digging deep to reach the inner me" is a great line...
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Very nice how you used the cut and love metaphor, but didn't use really gory and disgusting details. Great job with being forced to write something, it turned out pretty good.
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Paper cuts do sting...well done..the metaphor of love and cuts is good...sort of was creepy to read till I saw the author notes...thought it was on cutting yourself...ick...good write ..thanks for sharing
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I like how this one was tastefully written, no blood and guts all over the place. I loved the imagery, it was very nice. And although what you are talking about is quite powerful, your words are still airy.... if that is possible.
Your words are so beautiful, with such a deeper meaning.
Wonderful ~
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Paper cuts, like razor blade cuts, infinitely sharp, there's this book called the subtle knife, it's the sequel to the golden compass; the subtle knife is a knife that can cut between universes, that's how i imagine it. i love the picture.
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Paper cuts, like razor blade cuts, infinitely sharp, there's this book called the subtle knife, it's the sequel to the golden compass; the subtle knife is a knife that can cut between universes, that's how i imagine it. i love the picture.
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this is awesome.....
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i think the ending killed it a bit.
it was kind of like a let-down.
because everything else was broken.
and it didnt seem like it was ready
to be fixed.
good try, especially for a dare.
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Lots of emotion in this one
I get the feeling it was oh so much more than paper cuts you were referring to and I wish you all the best in this contest
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Very powerful piece sweetheart, I feel the sadness and the pain within your words. sad but beautiful.great job
Amarige
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Outstanding wisdom...good luck...
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