Spilling ink,
creating works
of heartfelt emotions.
Not for money
but beautiful craft,
we give our devotions.
It's in the blood.
Our very souls,
pouring out word's ocean.
We birth each line,
with labored breath
to express such notions.
Cut by critiques,
blunt and biting.
Our hearts singed by fire.
A poets lot,
is hardened road,
which we do aspire.
Never,no,
will we ever make
riches to retire.
Still that quill,
must paper etch,
with words meant to inspire.
In a list
A contest entry
- How Creative Are you by Dark Whispers.
375 points, ended February 17, 2008, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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I enjoyed this so much. And the back ground is silky move. The flow of this and its rhyming worked nicely for me. I can easily appreciate the message and can see how you could give words to your thoughts as well as you have here. I don't usually ask other writers these sorts of questions (or make the type of suggestion), but in second-to-last stanza, third line: '...which we do aspire" what to you think of:
"to which we aspire"? Just a thought though...I like it as it is but that thought occurred to me that's all.
AsIThink...
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And your words do insipre. Once again a very nicely done. Thank you!
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Im not too crazy about the repition in the poem, I don't think that it needs it, i like how the poemwas written in unrhymed tercets, and the meaning of poem was clear and conscise, great write
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hi sweetie, am a bit con-fuddled dabout the repetition you mention in your critique. Uhm are you talking about the rhyme scheme? Send me a note and let me know.
... peace and harmony... desi
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Yea this is great love the first stanza brings a grand flow of emotions and I find the honest sets the words free
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