I am perplexed…
But not nut a nutcase
Or a bookcase
With a briefcase
Trapped in time
In this brief place
Just in case…
(I am borne in these transfigured states of America)
I have anorexic thoughts
And have swelled up with profundity
I am a stargazer
I am mixed minerals
I am skin deep
I am my mother’s son
I am not the only one
And I think I have emotional amnesia…
I looked for clues under my pillow
As a boy I pondered under a weeping willow
I peep for a hint or a holler
I am challenged
I am searching me
Clothed in robes of reflection
I am an inflection
Am I your perception?
I am sin-deep
In gingerly, I seep
Undeterred, I creep
I keep missing sleep
Reap what I sowed
Stowed away like Harriet
But I carry it…
As for me, I want to be acreages of greenery
Who are you?
Author notes
Someone was listening to my reflections about my life and sparked this question in me. I think it was said kind of, 'tongue-in-cheek' but it sent me to my thinking chair...Who AM I? So, after about 1 week (last night actually), I scribed this piece. Thanks for the prick...
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I think you did a good job on 'self' at least it reads very normal, you jump from perplexed to absolute knowledge, from boy to man,'you will reep what you sowed, I was intrigued,
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Thank you very much ronnica. I appreciate this read. Thanks for your feedback/comments. It's good to see you here. Glad this intrigued you...hopefully enough to see you again? haha.
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the ultimate question,
so why do we need to know.
we all do but the why always intrigues me
wonderful journey of self discovery.
emotional amnesiaanorexic thoughts
incredible word choices
incredible write
GOD BLESS...
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Pisces, thanks like always for the great visit and your kind words. I think we 'need' to know because it burns or pulls at us. I think that if we all were already certain of the answers to this pentetrating question we might see some of the most incredible and life-fullfilled people around. So, I don't know if all already know. Maybe part of the answer? I could buy that... OR, perhaps we are drawn to or pulled on by that 'self-discover-me' sensation (lol). Never can be too sure.
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"clothed in robes of reflection, I am an inflection, am I your perception?" I really like that rhyming pattern, and also, "acreages of greenery" very coolio!
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Thank you very much for your wonderful comments and feedback...glad you enjoyed it. This is my personal favorite.
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Acreages of greenery...
fills your poetic soul! I am so glad to have this
time to read your poetry. Your writings leave us
well fed nutriously, and your words make the soul
smile powerfully!
well done poet, well done!
ears/Seattle
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Hello, ears...how did I miss this comment? Love it; thanks for this wonderful feedback. Wow...I'm really moved by this. I'm so glad that you feel this way about this piece. It's personally (get it? lol) - it's one of my favs...Thanks a million for the visit.
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Yes...
Loved the flow,the words,the structure. Everything.
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Thank you very much. I appreciate you taking time to read this. Great supportive comments. Will visit your site after I've had some rest. Thanks again.
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'And I think I have emotional amnesia…'
That so jumped out at me.. wow that is a wonderful way to put a block..
'As a boy I pondered under a weeping willow'
I have found their healing effects wonderful and would also sit under one as a kid, and looked for them when we would move, to make sure I had a good thinking spot..
'As for me, I want to be acreages of greenery'
As would I, as would anyone.. Just to blend in and be appreciated for what we are..
And the end line, 'Who are you?' that was great! I am rarely at a loss for words, I mean rarely.. This is a profound and astounding write. You are really talented. 'Breathless'...
I have a new found infatuation with words.. Thank you!
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"profound and astounding" ???
Wow...in the same piece (lol). You are a very astute, flattering critic. I think I'll frame this quote of yours (just in case AP loses this...lol). Priceless inspiration you give...Thank you so much. I have a new found admiration for positive feedback. I think I'm going to add you as a fav for some more air to my inflated craninum (lol).
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I like this! Flowing, almost silly to describe something real, true and deep. Nicely composed!
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Hey, thanks a lot. This was pretty enough for me. A little 'reflection-pool' soaking. Thanks for this comment/read.
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This is very nice! I especially like this part:
"Clothed in robes of reflection
I am an inflection
Am I your perception?"
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Wow...this is so touching that you see it this way. Thank you so much for this wonderful comment.
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thats interesting...
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Thanks for the read.
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This made me laugh a bit, I found it to be cute and also profound.
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Thank you very much. I hit my 'ironic-bone' a few times in life (and thought about this too with this piece). Appreciate this generous feedback...
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The word you use in this piece was amazing.. It all just flowed together.. Great write!!
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Thank you very much. I was wide open with this piece. Great compliment here. Thanks. Peace back to you.
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This is really intersting! I definitely liked it and how all the words rhyme at different times and in interesting ways. Awesome write!
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Awesome comment. Thanks so much for the read...heck, life is interesting, huh? lol.
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you know how i feel about your writing i thought this was over the top as a solo loved it.
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Hey kid, thanks for your sincerity and fresh eyez. And thanks for sharing this piece (I got some feedback today from a coworker that you showed this to).
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damn boy...i don't kno if you know who the heck you are but i do....boy your my SON!!!!.....lol this piece has to be one of your best pieces....well if not the best which is kind of hard to say. so many lines that stick....this one in particular:"as a boy i ponder like a weeping willow.....lol loved that line...or this:the whole last stanza...damn kid i have to call you on this one....lol...dial my son on the phone....damn, my phone is off, i'll wait until the morning or afternoon. this piece is str8 fire!!!! as the reggae artist say..."blaze it tup!"
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Listen, if I didn't know better (and I'm not too sure if I do), I'd think you were trying to get some 'points' with this comment (LOL...)...JK,...JK. Nah, thanks a lot for the feedback. It helps more than you know. I'll get with you later.
Love,
Dad...lol.
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This left me...speechless.
Brilliant write.
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Thank you very much. I'm almost left speechless by your comment. I don't really know what else to say.
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Wow, this was great work, I think this is one of my favorites that I have read from you.....
"I have anorexic thoughts
And have swelled up with profundity"
-I loved that entire stanza-
"I looked for clues under my pillow"---- I lOVED that line so much..........
--this piece really impressed me, very creative, loved reading this one...
-Layne
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I'm nearly gasping for air...this is a huge compliment. Thanks a lot. I could never have thought it would make such a nice impression. I'm truly moved....
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that question i am still searching for the answer to
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Hmmmm...thanks a lot for this response. On some level it seems like so many of us are (searching...I mean). Yeah, this question made me, "think and think and think!" too). And as I was thinking, I thought I should go ahead and script this and see what I come out with.
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I agree with swan! masterpiece! this sets of brain waves most definately. who am i, i don't know..i need to study my own book of life so i'll know which way to go.... you continually amaze me bro!
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Thanks over and over again. I really am just about speechless. Thanks a million.
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WOW! Ran jeez!
EASILY THE BEST OR ONE OF THE BEST WRITE YOU HAVE EVER PENNED!!
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Thanks man. I was thinking about this piece for over a week or so. I'm glad it came out decent. I really appreciate the constant support and encouragement.
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