so many different things are going wrong,
is there anyone who can help me hang on?
tears aren't just falling, they're crashing around me
i hear her conscious calling, to stop the bleeding
the screams have died,
and so have the visions inside
would she hear me, if i called her name?
would she still hold me, if she knew my shame?
and with my last breath i'm choking
will this all end, i'm hoping
my whole world is over one more time
will she forgive the guilty, and let me claim whats mine?
A contest entry
- music = life ♥ by CatastrophicSmile.
300 points, ended March 23, 2008, 18 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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hmmm this is a bit too much like the song. i wanted more of your write to be based around it rather than taking a lot of the lyrics and throwing them in it. it's like you don't really understand what the song is about. thank you for entering though =] ♥
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