Soooooo, this is the gate that Jesus was pointing to
I had to look way up, cuz, he sat in a tall, golden chair,
At the very first, I thought I was all alone
Then, I smiled, when I saw my brother standing there
Mommy and daddy must wonder where we both went
I can't wait to show them my shiny angel wings,
Bubby has the same shiny boy ones, I think
We hold hands, and run to play on the pretty swings
Then, we went again and talked to Jesus
Bubby and me told him we missed our mommy and dad,
He gently wiped away our tears, with a golden tissue
And said he would take care of it, please don't be sad
So, he reached in his bathrobe of white linen
And gave me and Bubby a golden cell phone,
We called up mommy and daddy, on speed dial
They were soooo excited for us to be in Jesus's home.
Author notes
JUST FOR YOU GIRLFRIEND.
2-2-2008
POETDONTKNOWIT
A contest entry
- Picture Prompt by stavykm.
1700 points, ended February 15, 2008, 13 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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WOW!!!! I love it!!!!!!!!!! I love it!!!!!!!! I love it!!!! It sounds as if I your were writing about me!!!!!!!!!! Another fantastic write!!!!!!!!!!!
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awww! I liked it, it was sweet! Well told, with good rhyme and rhythm. Words are awesome, you paint this scene for the reader with plenty of images. You get the... little-kid-ness... across well too, somehow. Well done, this was a wonderful write!
~QoA
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That's darling!
It's so sweet! It sounds like something a little kid would say in describing heaven. Good job!
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the hope
That thelight will be there. At my age I wonder. But your faith is so nicely penned my poet. Now do you respond? lol
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THANKS SO MUCH
Every time, I read your pennings, or enter one of your picture inspired contests, I feel as if I crawl in your head, and pull out your thoughts. Only for you!!!!!!!
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Beautiful
Wow I love how Jesus let them call God. We called up mommy and daddy, on speed dial
Then were soooo excited for us to be in Jesus's home.
Very nice and comforting to me personally. Isn't that little girl just precious. Thank you for entering and God Bless in the contest.
Many Blessings
Kelle Marie
stavykm
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This is a lovely take on the picture prompt full of wonderful visions of what heaven might be like, well done and goodluck in this contest
Karen
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