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Too Good For Me

You are the girl, the one for me.

Together, we're meant to be.

I gave you my love, but you threw it away.

It was cast to the side with nothing to say.

I feel the pain, it kills my heart.

The devils words are like a dart

That stabs me in my chest,

I fall to the ground and go to rest.

He says that she is too good for me,

That she's so perfect, unlike me.

He says that I'm just a disgrace

And turns around and SPITS in my face.

I grab the blade.  I slash my wrists.

As my knees begin to give, I clench my fists.

I lay on my bed and await the last breath,

As I close my eyes and feel my death.

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  • SchmexyBabii
    June 7, 2008

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    i liked it, i thought it was really emotional. i know the feeling that you arent good enough for the one you want. i think maybe you could have improved on the rhyme a tad but otherwise i loved it.
    keep up the good work.


  • DarkLotus4Life.
    February 4, 2008
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    amazing write. It's really deep, I could feel the pain.

  • xTomorrowx
    February 3, 2008

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    Wow...
    This is really deep...
    But don't believe that anyone is too good for you, it's what's inside that matters, and if you believe you aren't good enough you won't be, it's what you believe...
    Awesome job with this poem though, I love it...