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Big Bang Theory

Before the bang,

as light slights,

a dot of day to be
 displacing space

and physics,


From a filmy energy

 re-spun memory cocoon,
time, the imago
emerges.

 

Wings unfurl into first night

and on that first flight

 the universe morphs

 into mind.

 

It happens;
all the time.

 

Author notes

this poem is about the beginning of time and this universe (according to M theory, only one of an infinite number of universes). I use the allusion of a butterfly to point out that they have equal significance in nature and its symbolism of renewal.

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  • dabpunx
    July 5

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    wow i am so glad i found you. i clicked return the favor? and this amazing poem lept out at me! i read about quantum physics for fun am so glad to find it expressed in poetic form. this is the type of poetry i like, i'm always trying to express the odd nature of the cosmos and experience and you do that eloquently and harmonically.


  • Perception silver member
    February 12
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    I really like the imagery behind this. It is a beautiful write, and has a deeper meaning at the same time. I think your lines are very smooth and a pleasure to read.

    Good job
    ~~ Keep at it
    • WritingWretch gold member
      February 12
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      thanks for the compliment.

      I was just advised that my work is choppy and since the comment came with why and how to correct it I was happy to get the advice, but praise is always appreciated espically for the work, worthy or not.

  • Zahhar gold member
    February 12

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    M theory is an interesting one. purely mathematical with no way to prove the theory--at least right now.

    this is also kind of choppy, but smoother than the last poem of yours i read. my older poems are choppy, too. i spent a lot of time studying prosody, and this helped me smooth out my lines, but i think that just writing and reading your own work out loud tends to help smooth out the lines as well, especially over time.

  • George Bowling
    February 9

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    a nice write, it really took me there. as a student of science i have a little difficulty tying this in with M theory (which im also unsure of), but your words are eloquent enough to keep it all afloat. nicely done. thank you also for your comment on my poem "Babylonia: Exodus".

    'wings unfurl
    into first night
    and on that first flight
    the universe
    wafts into mind'

    gorgeous.


  • lalainya rising
    February 5

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    The begining is lovely, reminding me of the common theroy that light was the first thing to come into being.
    the second stanza brings to mind the idea that the light manifested from somthing that was already there; a thought.
    The third brings to mind the idea of "the butterfly effect" the sequence of actions=cause and eternal effect. The buterfly being the poems metaphor enhances this.
    And the last two lines bring it back to a natural-ness. Reminding that the uncommon is is common and that is a good thing in the grand scheme byond which we can see.


  • AliceinPoetryLand Moderators member
    February 3
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    Welcome to All Poetry !

    Such a soft and beautiful part of life. We don't take enough time to meditate this and watch these things. Lovely piece. Put a smile on my face
    Thank you.
    If you need any help here at AP please don't hesitate to contact myself or any other online Greeter. We are always willing to help
    Gaylene

  • Celtic Legend
    February 2
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    Beutuful! First Born Butterflies are so beautiful!

  • grannyeri gold member
    February 2
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    Congratulations on posting your first poem on AP. Welcome to this site. Remember how excited I was to post that first write and let others know I was a poet. Liked the flow of this poem, and the ending - nothing out of the ordinary here you are saying, it happens all the time. Check cocoon. Liked the alliteration used in these lines.

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