Softly and tenderly I kiss your lips
My hand finds your nipple and gently grips
The other hand slips right down to your hips
An evening with you is for making sweet love
Pull me toward you and whisper my name
Your hand on my breast just started a game
An evening with you is for making sweet love
My hands on your body start doing the same
Sink to the bed and we kiss and we touch
Sweet little nothings that say quite so much
Hands now behind me find something to clutch
I'm lying with you and making sweet love
Holding me closely and treating me right
With promise of passion that lasts all night
I'm lying with you and making sweet love
Your hands and your arms, now holding me tight
Things turn about and you're soon on the top
Excitement is mounting I beg you don't stop
All the World's lovers you're Queen of the crop
I'm on the bed and you're making sweet love
Taking control and I pick up the pace
Looking straight down at the smile on your face
You're on the bed and we're making sweet love
Ev'rything's fine all in the right place
Fitting much closer than hand in a glove
A man and his wife are making sweet love
Looking at you as I play up above
A wife and her man are making sweet love
Author notes
Interlocking sonnets, one triplet (aaaB cccB dddB b , and one Rubaiyat (aaBa ccBc ddBd b . The B lines shared or closely related in each sonnet.
In a list
A contest entry
- In Bed with you .....................over 18 please by Abe 1.
430 points, ended February 3, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Getting rid of the rest of my points by Aesthete.
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Holy Pancakes
Never before have I read erotic poetry that was so tasteful and had such meaning. You did a great job in letting the reader know that this isn't just a night of great sex. It was much more it is the joing of two souls in a night of sexual bliss. not only an erotic poem but a poem of love and passion.
You havea gift for capturing the attention of the reader and keeping it all the way through to the very last line. I think that my favorite line in all was
"Fitting much closer than hand in a glove
A man and his wife are making sweet love"
because in that one moment you took this piece to a much higher level.
very well done
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What a form
erotic poetry is hard enough. To use an interlocking sonnet to do it is showing off. Congrats for facing down a tough challenge and succeeding at it. I enjoyed the personal moment
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Very sweet and passionate. I love the gentleness and intimacy displayed through your words. Even more so the two perspectives of the lovers.
. Rewarded 4
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this is extremely loving...softly erotic...a blend of both make a sensual reading for your readers. Love,Lane
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This is quite good with a rapid smooth tempo that amplifies the image of two lovers. I would classify this as an erotic poem but it is penned with loving passion that makes physical attraction a beautiful thing.
Love,
Amera♥
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thanks for such a great poem and how nice to see passion so deep is felt in a lovely marriage
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A great poem and I love it. Its sensual yet not overbearing or disgusting. I couldnt begin to think about writing on this level so I will just sit back and admire and throw as much applause as i can your way.
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an excellent awesome sonnet .. i can feel the word and see the images in my mind... that what a work of art is all about... thanks for sharing
. Rewarded 4
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Brilliant
An excellent write from a content and imagery stand point. Unbelievable creativity to interlock sonnets with schemes changes. Nothing more I can say except you deserve to be applauded for youe efforts. rhon
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OK, I give up. There's me trying to conquer sonnets and then you go and do this to me, you're not playing fair!
It is in my eyes, brilliant, but I'm no expert, so I'll just stand back and admire from a distance.
Well done
Love
Sue x
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