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The 'J' Word

The eyes,

it’s always the eyes

giving us away as pupils

and wrinkles contract,

no green
on this messy palate
of emotion but
mostly red

as blood rushes
to the head creating
a fight or flight reaction
as we sharpen our

words, with intent
to fling them
at a perceived enemy  
with great malice and

it’s always the same
as we prepare
to defend what we believe
is ours; or is it?

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  • luna-midnight gold member
    February 13, 2008

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    hahahahah, this is wonderful and lovely once again. jealous is very bad isnt it, and you have described it so well, great and vivid illusions of an emotion!
    great job
    stephanie =)


  • HaileeDear
    February 7, 2008

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    i love it when people write short lines like you did. it keeps me reading. you did a wonderful job in painting a picture. good luck in the contest
    xoxo
    pixie


  • Auburn Sunrise gold member
    February 6, 2008

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    ahhh... jealousy....

    possibly the best jealousy poem I've ever read. I wish you'd written this back when I had my "jealousy" contest - you would've won gold!
    Brilliant poem. Good luck in the contest.


  • Sandygram
    February 4, 2008

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    Your words are so true. It is never a pretty sight when jealousy rears its ugly head in a relationship. On either side of it leaves hurtful feelings. Wonderful right my friend. You take care. Best of luck. Sandy


  • Layne
    February 4, 2008

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    "it’s always the same
    as we prepare
    to defend what we believe
    is ours; or is it?"

    --OHHHHH, I lvoed this, very nice take on the prompt, good luck

    -Layne

  • tara wilson gold member
    February 4, 2008

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    "as we sharpen our

    words, with intent
    to fling them
    at a perceived enemy "

    Great work here Love this one..


  • whispernthedark Greeters member
    February 3, 2008

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    wonderful....those greens and eyes always give us away. wonderful write, you satisfied my pallette....best of luck in the contest.
    ♥
    whisper


  • alexandrathegreat
    February 3, 2008

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    Nice green and red contrast, I feel like it's Christmas all over again. LOL. Nice job.

  • goalsv
    February 3, 2008
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    Very well done. Straight forward and truthful. Nice write.


  • Margaret Denham gold member
    February 3, 2008

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    Is it the same? I honestly don't know but your words made me think and that, to me, is important when reading a poem; to make the reader look inside themselves. Well said and good luck in the contest.

    Margaret


  • Wild Mustang
    February 2, 2008

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    Beautiful piece, Michael. No one could've put it better. Good luck in the contest, the outcome shall be interesting .


  • ScarletO gold member
    February 2, 2008

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    Yes, or is it? I do not think anyone likes feeling jealous, it is a reaction that need control. Well said words.


  • BleedingDeep
    February 2, 2008

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    This pome is sagnificent! It's very creative, in it's own way! And i also love the meaning of it, as well ! Fantastic Pome! 10-10 golden Stars!!


  • Dalaney gold member
    February 2, 2008
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    Tight, to the point, and ending with a jab...good job. I do like this poem very much. Love, Lane


  • BellaD
    February 2, 2008
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    Good poem. Powerful final stanza. Well done and best of luck in the contest.

  • Amarige
    February 2, 2008

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    ohhh I like that expression of fight or flight reaction ..this was powerful dear one..wonderful!
    Amarige


  • Blue Rew silver member
    February 2, 2008

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    Great questions, wonderful observations of
    the ugly side of human nature. Blue

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