these pictures on my floor,
i'm looking for the one of us,
the one where we're in the park,
i'm looking for it,
for the first time,
since you've been gone,
i've missed you,
and you've been gone for awhile,
every since the accident,
i'll never forget,
the way we loved each other,
but i'd rather remember,
the way you were,
in the park that day,
i really miss you,
so i continue to look,
for that picture,
just to see your face,
i'll keep the picture in my mind,
until we're together agian,
i miss you,
and here's the picture!!
A contest entry
- Picture Inspired Contest (February) by Denierim.
600 points, ended March 2, 2008, 30 entries
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Comments
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i like it. it is msterious. it leaves you wanting to know what happened. well done and good luck in the contest
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awwies
its so sad, and loveing and caring, I LOVED IT!
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This is such a sad story filled with emotions... You went deep with this one, and I like the story itself. Looking for that picture among all the others, the picture of you and the loved one... Beautiful work with this one!
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*tear*
awwww you captured the feeling of lonelyness and longing VERY well;-) loved it!!!
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This was such a sad write! The images you painted are so vivid and the emotions are so intense that it reaches out to me...It is simple yet intense...The imagery is wonderful..and the tone you used ( sorrow and love) was wonderful....I feel like I am the character and I am holding onto this picture, something that brings back the memories of the person I cherished and loved...I could feel the tears running down my eyes...I could feel him so close in my heart yet so far away....
There are so many images that come to my mind reading this....Great job!
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