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Beaten to Breathe

Dieing to breathe-
Conscience lashed with unbridled force,
Screams, cries for mercy shouted out,
As crimson insanity trails away
Staining politely bleached white purity of memory,
Leaving hope scathed,
Broken,  dripping impurity from the core,

Draining down into reality's abyss. 

 

As fear seeps into open wounds,

Screams of night erupt once more. 

Author notes

Read into the lines if you with. It's all about perspective...

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  • Luminescence
    February 8, 2008

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    Staining politely bleached white purity of memory

    Melissa and I both agree that that was the best line in the whole piece.... even though we do get a tad hint of cutting in it.... but at the same time there are so many ways to interpert the piece so we will not DQ you for it.... because it is a REALLY great piece...

    Thank you for entering and good luck,
    ~Lumin.


  • Lanivitybeauty
    February 8, 2008
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    Supurb! I loved it........very deep! The emotions i feel from this......awesome

    Good luck,
    Lanivity

  • tara wilson gold member
    February 4, 2008

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    oh - you have made this filled with angst, yes..it is very sad, and painful to read. I tend to try and write more positive poetry, even when I want to write these. But there are times when we need to...thanks so much for your entry..