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Storm

Out of my mind and into your mouth,
my darkest fears -
The words spill out,
clear and flowing
like the raindrops hit the ground -
I am their earth -
And I am wet…
And I am cold…
And I am frozen…
Your sun won’t shine on me
and it leaves me so lost
in the clouds of your eyes

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1st poem in over a year...

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  • xeroabyss II
    August 13

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    Sounds as if you trusted and confided in someone who one day used your secrets to turn against and attack you(?)
    The muddied earth analogy is quite profound to express your sullen emotions soddened with sorrow.


  • shiratikva
    December 13, 2008

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    well done

    I like it.
    ''words spill out'' ''like the raindrops hit the ground''
    Wonderful imagery.
    Your imagination is just great.
    ''clouds of your eyes''. I have never heard better than this.
    Good job.


  • Jeremy0826 silver member
    February 2, 2008

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    Wow, this is great!
    Thanks a lot for sharing this
    one here. I love the imagery
    and emotions in this. Keep
    up the wonderful work here!




    Jeremy0826