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 The Engagement



The gate swings on its hinges in the cooling Autumn breeze
a tapestry of gold and red spun by fallen leaves,
they cling tight to each other, for every second counts
the sound of marching feet as the eerie tension mounts.

One last kiss he gives her with a promise that he’ll write
like summer rain her tears fall, until he’s out of sight.

       My darling, things are fine here, the lads can be quite fun,
       the weather’s not too cold, we’ve even seen some sun,

       "Any chance of gloves dear, and a pound of Campbell’s tea,
       one last question darling, when I’m home, please marry me?"

 

              ‘Winter’s fast approaching, the village seems so bare
              life goes on the same here, but there’s no Christmas Fair,
              the church was struck by lightning and whooping cough is rife
              in answer to your question, “Yes, I’ll be your wife”.

Many months have passed now the seasons came and went
letters passed between them, so much love was sent.

       ‘I love you so my sweetheart, your smile warms up my heart
       I long for days to hold you and our life together start,
       at night it’s cold and lonely though our moons are both the same,
       the war may soon be over and you my bride, I’ll claim’.


              ‘The crops are in, the yield is good, the meadows in full bloom,
              my dress is lace and simple, it waits here in my room,
              I read reports and pray each night that you’ll be here with me
              before the year is over, oh please God, hear my plea’.

His letters became fewer as the fighting got intense
her letters were sent every week to mask her own pretence,
a long cold lonely winter she had spent without a word,
until that fateful morning her heartfelt scream was heard.

Returned to her, her letters, unopened and unread,
she knew that it was over as she cried upon her bed,
her life now lay in tatters, her spirit it had died
no husband and no marriage, her tears spent, now she sighed.

Life went on as normal though she vowed to love no-more,
with simple grace and fortitude and courage to the core,
her dress she kept in tissue in a box upon a shelf
or wore it in soft candlelight, dancing by herself.

The day the war was over, jubilation through the land,
with a heavy heart she went outside to hear the marching band,
standing by the gate on her toes to see the sight
marching men, all heroes with loved ones to unite.

A smile upon her lips but an aching in her soul
she closed the door behind now she never could be whole,
a gentle knocking stirred her, excited cries without
her sister burst in though the door with one ecstatic shout.

She takes the box down from the shelf with love inside her eyes
removes the dress so slowly looks at it and sighs,
she fusses round her sister, so beautiful and bright
radiant and blushing for this her wedding night.

 

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There he stood her soldier, her love who went to war,
returning as a shadow of the man he was before,
the smile on his lips and the sparkle in his eyes
hid from her the horrors and the deeply seated lies.

 

They cling tight to each other, for every passing day,
whatever life may offer, together they will stay.
 

 

 

 

Author notes

I dedicate this poem to Amera who gave me the inspiration to write this in my own style. Below is the link to Amera's poem 'When The Pipers Come'
http://allpoetry.com/poem/3865077

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  • My Chronos gold member
    November 12
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    Very sweet and shows each one personal struggle. The worse thing about being inlove with a man that goes to war is he usually comes back a changed person.


  • Rebekah-Ann silver member
    November 11
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    With tears in my eyes I am so happy to reach the end of this poem!!! What a delight. You are truely a poet of wonder!

    I love the form you used and I loved the rhyme and meter.

    Congratulations on being member of the month November 2009! So happy that I stumbled upon your loving poetry today.

    Take care
    Becks


  • fiona8 silver member
    November 10
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    A lovely poem story of old. Nicely rhymed. Enjoyed so much.
    My compliments.


  • maybeillgohome
    November 10

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    Wow. You really have talent. I feel like this could be one of the best poems I've ever read. It just flowed so beautifully, it almost made me cry. I love this, and hope you keep writing!!!!!!
    Love,
    maybe

  • James Holdaway
    November 10

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    what a beautiful poem and story.

    Very well written. It flowed just right. I love this style of poetry because it is easy to read and follow. Congrats on being Poet Of The whatever. I'll have to read more later. Got to go.
    P.s. It brought a tear to my eye.


  • sinfull
    November 9

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    breathtakingly well-done. You have spun simple pie-slices of everyday stories into a sweet romance that felt like my own ancestors were being told, great story-telling and rhyme skill.

  • davidwright silver member
    November 9

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    An obvious winner in everyone's mind. It brought back the words from an old folk song I've heard "Johnny I hardly knew ya."
    A very enjoyable read.

    Happy trails.

  • reveller silver member
    November 5

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    A delightful.

    story, so well laid out with the letters passing from one to the other. Kept me guessing, but I was so pleased it had an uplifting ending. I thoroughly enjoyed reading this poem, a good story, well rhymed.

  • Yes I can only reiterate what others have said before. This is an amazing style and brought a huge lumo th my throat The flow, meter and rhyme are fantastic as are all your writings. We are going to read some amazing work in this group.
    Fabulous Sue
    Gaylene


  • Lulu Gee silver member
    November 2

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    I'm Ecstatically Sad....

    Oh Dear Sue....This is not a poem to read at 4am when all alone, I'm in floods girl!!!
    No wonder this won all those gongs, it's a treasure and you my perfect poetess.
    Love Lu x
    ps I'm back to bed now thinking of this beauty and also how many women whose men didn't make it back.

  • poets whisper silver member
    November 2

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    Nicely done. Congratulations on the shiny gold things. What better place to go to for advice than the lovely amera?


  • Bluemonday silver member
    November 2

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    this poem moved me to tears Sue. It so wonderful, a story told so many times unfortunately. I so wanted the twist at the end and got it, just perfect. I have just read "Birdsong" by Sebastian Faulks and saw so many parallels here. I too have written war poems but none from this romantic angle. Truly lovely....Dan


  • paperparadox silver member
    November 1

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    This is just beautiful

    Brought a tear to my eye, it did!

    So beautifully written; a story masterfully told. A true classic, methinks!

    Congratulations on the Gold in this, and for the other awards in previous contests. A truly well-deserved acknowledgement of superb narrative poetry.


  • CelticQueen
    October 31

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    A lovely story, if a bit predictable. But that's okay. It's still a great story. I will add that it's a bit confusing at the end, what with her sister showing up and all. Why add that? I got lost and had to read that a couple of times.

    But you gave me a story! And a good one at that! Thank you for following the contest's intent. Congratulations on the gold. cq

  • This is a spectacular effort. I am impressed with all of the perspectives given here. You have made judging this contest very difficult, but also very enjoyable. Thank you for entering.


  • Amera gold member
    May 23

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    This is truly a masterpiece and to have it dedicated to me is such an honor. I don't feel worthy. You are one of the best poets i know and enjoy reading; your work will long out live us all.

    Love,
    Amera

  • Straight to the finalists' list. Thanks for your entry.


  • Symphony
    April 14

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    Too long for my liking even though your rhymes were spot on, almost impeccable and I truly did find many sections that I loved but - it just dragged a tiny bit for me.

    "There he stood her soldier, her love who went to war,
    returning as a shadow of the man he was before,
    the smile on his lips and the sparkle in his eyes
    hid from her the horrors and the deeply seated lies."

    Was definitely my favourite section!

    Thanks for entering.


  • a sweetheart lost
    August 8, 2008

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    I really love this poem. I like that you use and elegant and older way of forming sentences and using more discriptive mords. this is my favorite " There he stood her soldier, her love who went to war,
    returning as a shadow of the man he was before,
    the smile on his lips and the sparkle in his eyes
    hid from her the horrors and the deeply seated lies"

    this is what breakes my heart more than any seperation.


  • Thomas Scott gold member
    July 7, 2008

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    Good stuff!

    Such a wonderfully told tale. The detail does it for me ... marching bands and swinging gates, the gathered crops ...

    I love reading your stuff.
    Thanks.

    Tom


  • Peachy
    July 6, 2008

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    This is amazingly written!
    Not a single flaw or stumble and what a beautiful story behind woven words.
    Thank you for entering!


  • Heavens Child
    April 29, 2008

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    Beautifully written! The flows is so smoothe and the rhyme is very well done. Best wishes and thank you for entering.

  • ecrivain01
    April 27, 2008
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    Good job.

    I'm all for happy endings.

  • hscopazzi
    April 2, 2008

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    Wow!!

    Not what I expected! I loved that he came home, however, their years together will not be easy!

    Harmony


  • ferg silver member
    April 1, 2008

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    poignant with promise

    Beautifully written on many levels. The rhyming is solid and unforced with a heartwarming love story. Many folks these days will relate to this scenario very directly. I love the conversational style throughout, nice touch.


  • redteacup
    March 15, 2008

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    I love this tale. It's so beautiful... the gut-wrenching tragedy followed by a miracle. I especially like that she wears the dress in soft candle light. I'm not sure why, but that image struck me as so sad and melancholy but beautiful at the same time.


  • waydownuponjoy
    March 12, 2008

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    A Lovely poem

    with a good story line that kept my attention all the way through. Your style and form worked well and it was a pleasure to read it. Congratulations for the trophy as well as it was well earned. keep writing, joy


  • Mairi bheag gold member
    March 1, 2008

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    A touching story in a jaunty rhythm. Deserved the wee green vase, I'm certain.


  • Legend silver member
    February 21, 2008
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    I do know this piece and the writer as i have read and commented before All that i said then is once again reiterated here Excellent rhyme and flow A pleasure to have read again Good luck in the contest

    Please do not reply to this comment as i wish to keep the contest Anonymous If you have not entered your second poem please do so making sure to name this one in your authors notes Thank you


  • Legend silver member
    February 18, 2008
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    Thank you for your entry


  • Cupcrazy gold member
    February 14, 2008
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    Yes, wonderful story executed in lovely rhyme.


  • Ryno
    February 14, 2008

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    Yes

    You have talent with rhyme, flow & emotion. Thats the only reason I'm putting you threw. Work on your other poetic elements & lets see something different in the preliminary rounds. I have faith in you. Good luck. Thanks; Ryan.


  • ten thousand cicadas gold member
    February 14, 2008

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    No.

    Really beautiful story! Excellent skill with rhyme and great emotion. I guess, I was looking for bits of other poetic elements. I'm only one judge though.


  • Lily of the Valley
    February 8, 2008

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    The war years must have been witness to uncountable stories of triumph and tragedy, sadness, happiness, loss and gain to millions of people from all walks of life. I doubt there were many who would have experienced something as exhilarating as having a loved one return at the end of the war then they believed they were lost for good, though there must have been a few. I think this poem captures the spirit of the tale with complete clarity and I like the touch of including the love letters.


  • GettingPlayed09
    February 6, 2008
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    WOW this is so sad but yet so happy it was really amazing nice job

  • Rehana.Rutti
    February 6, 2008
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    It is such an intense poem, reading each line I was able to see this poem. Really beautiful.


  • sapphireangelwings
    February 6, 2008

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    I couldn't stop reading! You told a timeless story in such a fresh and wonderful way! The tempo of the poem kept up with the form and the rythme! Great job with this piece!


  • Gods-Artgal
    February 6, 2008

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    This is a great poem.
    I like how this is talking about war and marriage.
    Just a lovely poem.
    There is not much more I can say than this.
    Great Job.


  • Star Shine
    February 6, 2008

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    This is beautiful and the rhythm you incorporate is perfect for this lovely verse. This brings a trear to the eye, happy and sad, the ending was perfect as well, very well done.


  • HeavensDaughter
    February 6, 2008

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    breathtaking

    This is such a beautiful poem...so touching and heartrending. Filled with hope and sorrow and then joy! Reading it took me along those emotional paths.

    One especially heartbreaking part is this:
    "There he stood her soldier, her love who went to war,
    returning as a shadow of the man he was before,
    the smile on his lips and the sparkle in his eyes
    hid from her the horrors and the deeply seated lies."

    This is wonderfully written! It swept me away.


  • Musimwa
    February 6, 2008

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    very good

    it is full of imagery. Keep this up Mum. I love it. Thank u for the comment u left on my recent piece. God bless u.

    son


  • tightrope
    February 6, 2008

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    This bittersweet story is beautifully rhymed and the meter is right on. I normally don't like to read long poems but this one read so well and held my interest. Very well done, indeed!


  • z etoile
    February 4, 2008
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    Wow!


  • mommyof2
    February 3, 2008

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    A truly enjoyable read Sue...so full of emotion and wonderful imagery. The story, style and rhyme was delighful. Loved the happy ending too! Well done.


  • Quill
    February 3, 2008

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    Good tale Sue,like the reference to Cambell's tea those little touches add realism and authenticity.


  • Pete Greenslade gold member
    February 3, 2008

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    this is lovely ,full of nostalgic romance. and even a very happy ending..love it ''' mills and boon eat your hearts out xx


  • moonbumps silver member
    February 3, 2008

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    What a truly splendid write so full of emotion and you leave nothing out, the story flows beautifully and leaves you feeling so elated at the end-I was so glad this ended happily when so many others didn't...Bless you Suz for this brilliant write which so inspires me to keep going! PS-If I could give you 4 applause I would!!! xxx Hilly

  • Michael P gold member
    February 2, 2008

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    Your style is amazing, you should grow with it. This is a beautiful piece of work, the flow was absolutely flawless and the entertwined letters was an excellent idea. Great work.


  • SomeonesToySoldier gold member
    February 2, 2008

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    Its a beautiful poem. heartfelt and spacial to me. I got my orders to deploy to Kuwait (before the war) less than 2 weeks after I proposed to my fiance. Unfortunatly unlike your poem I did not have my happy ending. She left me not to long into my deployment. Its a great poem. Happy, yet sad. Beautiful.

  • Bad Bill
    February 2, 2008

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    A beautiful story poem, Sue, rhymed to perfection and tenderly told. You are queen of the rhymers.

    Bill


  • Swtpoetryman
    February 2, 2008

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    A FINE PIECE, INDEED!

    A very fine and powerful piece filled with heart and soul and pure emotion. I'm DELIGHTED that this one had a happy ending even if her soldier came home to her

    returning as a shadow of the man he was before

    -for too many that go off to war never return and and leave their loved ones behind - who have died inside - from their tagic and violent fate! WAR is good for no one and nothing if you ask me BUT what else can many a young man do BUT right for his country and do his duty so all of his frineds, loved one, and family can live freely?

    A powerful piece with a thought provoking and universal message, indeed!

    Love & Peace!
    Earl.


  • Rheea gold member
    February 2, 2008

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    I can not tell you what I think I have not the words.
    It is absolutely the most amazing poem of this type to address the wife the woman and her feelings.. it is timeless it is beautiful.. God Bless thank you for putting it out and sharing it.


  • ScottishPrincess silver member
    February 2, 2008

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    This is just so poignant,beautifully written ,full of emotion and heart touching,an refreshing read


  • cricketjeff gold member
    February 2, 2008

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    Perfection!
    Better by far than my poem inspired by the same Amera poem I am glad to see you back writing "Happy-Sad" better than anyone else on AP!

  • Amera gold member
    February 2, 2008
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    Wow…. You certainly did use my poem for inspiration. Inspired you were indeed because you took it many steps further. The fluid verse you have composed is spellbinding. You brought the reader from hope to despair back to hope then to elation. I love the way you used the letters from each lover tying it together with the narration. There aren’t enough superlatives to say how much I enjoyed this poem. Brilliant!

    Love,
    Amera*

  • Legend silver member
    February 2, 2008

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    Sue this is a wonderful piece you show how rhyme should and can be written, I love the format you used at the beginning of interacting letters.Leading on to sadness, only to complete with a joyful reunion Excellent work
    Now why do i not have you on my favourites list Must put that right


  • arafura gold member
    February 2, 2008

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    Both your poem and Amera's are very good and capture the poignant moments of return very well. Well done!!

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