Here I sit again listening
to you spew your word vomit
Shoving you're opinions down every ones throat
Harsh words hover in the air
All the gold in the world
couldn't cover the shit you dish out
How can you stand yourself
Sitting in judgment of everyone you meet
You pretend to be everything your not
Reality check my friend
your a wolf in sheep's clothing
waiting to attack
You don't fool me
I see you for what you really are
So take you're shit
and go shovel it out to someone else
Author notes
Firequeen
A contest entry
- xx.[LET THE BODIES HIT THE FLOOR];; by chasing rainbows.
300 points, ended February 13, 2008, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Again, WOW! This is a powerfully written piece. I am blown away by your writing style! Such intense, deep, troubling anger spilling out across the page. Keep the ink flowing, my friend. Writing the anger out of one's life seems to help. I should know, because it helps me sometimes.
~Donna~
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This is another intense venting of your pain. I hope poetry helps in releasing a little of your anger, but I assume you will only be truly happy when you have erased this pain from your life. I hesitate to critique such powerful poems, but you have a tendency to use "your" when you mean "you're (contraction of you are)". Peace, Liz
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This is GREAT!!!
very strong write,
and a wonderful take on the prompt
i wish you luck in the contest, but this looks cup worthy to me,
Excellent write! keep them coming
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definitely good and emotional but I think you've confused "your" and "you're." Common mistake, but excellent write.
xx Sin
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