[let me bleed;]
let me scream
let me cry
let me f a l l a p a r t .
my bed feels empty without you,
but the warmth of your body still [lingers] there
determined to drive me insane
which is dangerous
when I've already been pushed to
breaking point.
I feel like we've crossed a line
and lost the map we need to get back.
there are monsters in this part of the woods,
watching,
waiting
for a fresh kill...
are you stil here?
or...
am I
[alone?]
Author notes
Sin City Rockette
8. Changing
This is what happens when I do something and damn the consequences. I regret it, and get my heart broken as a consolation prize. :]
"Regret is insight that comes a day too late"
-Unknown
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very well written sad but beautiful, loved the wording in it so sorry you feel this way hopefully you can move on and regain the beauty that was there once before. good luck and thanks foo your entry
xoxo
tash -
Thanks for entering and good luck!
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I liked this. The flow wasn't really there but it didn't seem like the type that was meant for it. It was good though. Thanks!
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this is a very emotional write. i enjoyed it very much. thanks for the entry.
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'let me scream
let me cry
let me f a l l a p a r t .'
I really liked that part^^
Though the whole poem was so idk emotional [=
It's really goody [=
♥
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oooooo, this is a very thought inducing write. i love the last few lines. they brought on that whole "what have i done" complex, while at the same time they reinforce the self doubt that is shown thoroughout the piece. great write.
Rob -
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Thank you, I was in a really tough spot emotionally when I wrote this. First heartbreak is not fun, but it's a hell of a creative influence.
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for some reason this strikes a fear in me though i like it none the less. thanks for sharing <3
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nice, i like it! good luck in my contest! sexy muffin lol later
Suna Ketsuma -
i like it, its twisted, lol but its good. i haven't commented for soo long my bad! later!
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This is definitely a 'slightly different' poem. I love the creativity of using brackets and spaces to emphasise the words and feelings. Thank you for entering!
Ellie
p.s your author entry info says you are 99! I presume you're not ?
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