Party time
Just turned twenty one
Free as a bird
Going clubbing with all her buds
Girl fun, tonight at a price
First night in a club
Dressed to the hilt
Friday night
Painted toes
Innocence
Having a blast
Dancing the night away
Minding her own business
The devil wears Armani
On the prowl
Eye contact
Hypnotizing
Touchdown
Mesmerised
Pearly white's glistening
Your hot, buy you a drink?
She swoons, loving all the attention
A trip to the bathroom
Leaves her drink unattended
Drugged
Ecstacy
Kidnapped
A horrible mistake
The wolf in sheep's clothing.
Author notes
A version of this happened to myself at a town festival. I had taken my 14 yr old daughter and one of her friends. It was a nightmare. I also have altered several things. But it is a true story. And no, I wasn't partying with the young girls, that's what I meant by altered. The state police were called, but nothing came out of it except my damaged mental state forever.
2-2-2008
POETDONTKNOWIT
A contest entry
- At One's Mercy by CherryOnTop.
1000 points, ended February 4, 2008, 8 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - immeasurable. by girl shaman.
1150 points, ended February 24, 2008, 33 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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First off i am very sorry for that tramatiac thing happening to you and i hope things in time will heal.
as for the poem; well it is extreamly straight forward and i wouldn't really call it a poem; more like a recording of what happened. like a story really; but without metaphore.
either way i want to thank you for entering; im sorry i couldn't give any suggestions
<3
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i ike this,its different
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This is definetly being at someones mercy.Your trauma will be with you for a very long time. Something like this causes so many different problems within ones self. Thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest.
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Powerfully disturbing and truly a warning for all. I hope that all women will heed your warning and avoid such situations.
My fav line
"The devil wears Armani"
Live in creepy days, we do. My prayers of healing are with you Angelica.
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I like this, I've had something like this happen to 1 of my friends.
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wow the pain in this poem of your so so intence. i do hope that thing will get better. but the way that you put this in to words was truly excelnt to me. i sure do hope that you will have a goodday
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Oh I'm So Sorry
I'm glad you are semi OK. Yes trauma like this is emotionally damaging forever. Excellent write though I must say I loved the ending The wolf in sheep's clothing, for you just never know sometimes!!.
The title is brilliant Ecstacy At A Price and a huge one at that. The flow was perfect. Thank you for sharing your gift to write your experience in poetic form. Wishing you many blessings
Kelle Marie
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