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It Rains ...[E Chiove...]





Float along the canals with me
even on a rainy day, when we
sit close beneath the canopy
wet and dry, breath comes easily;
in moments held for keeping.

Falling light, the clouds so still
will leave you long before I will,
into sunset, pouring sweet wine
tasting airy whispers; misted fine
among night flower drippings.

Watch the turning colors of sky
to inviting darkness, moonlight eyes
on veranda above glistening glows
stars will make our draping shadows;

until dawn’s hazy driftings.



Author notes

Italian Beauty

Rhyme pattern: aabbc,ddeec,ffggc.

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  • leander Moderators member
    February 22, 2008

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    You have managed to stay quite well out of the clichéd side of love poetry with this poem, and I do like that

    Thank you for entering this contest, I wish you the best of luck!
    Leander


  • Ja Vorbesc
    February 15, 2008

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    Favorite part: in moments held for keeping.

    Beautiful poem! Some spots seemed unwieldy, but then they fit in with the tone of the poem, so they work perfectly. Three clappies for you, though you deserve more.


  • Mari Goes gold member
    February 8, 2008
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    the claps...


  • SeptemberFaith
    February 7, 2008

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    I am so bad at writing form poetry.. but I love reading it and this is so beautifully written. I love the thought of such romance. If someone wrote me such beautiful words I would probably never leave their side.

    Thank you for sharing this with me. =)

    Criss


  • displayed
    February 2, 2008

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    Perfect night, just enchanting!
    and there is nothing wrong with the title nor with the translation. Chiove is a word in the Neapolitan dialect. E chiove does mean it rains


  • gaze
    February 2, 2008

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    Bella y romantica Venezia... should be there now
    Your poem is just as romantic. Lovely sights your words provided.


  • just mercedes gold member
    February 2, 2008

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    captivating, enthralling write. Purity of word choice and phrasing, an immaculate presentation of images of rain, and the intimate privacy that it brings to lovers. I loved particularly / night flower drippings/


  • tara wilson gold member
    February 2, 2008
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    this is beautiful..every line...this brings so many romantic images of being in rain..

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