Oh God
I know that
why are you not revealing your
substantial face
as you belong to me
you belong to him
you belong to everyone
and we all are lingering to
betoken you
In the dissimilar images
while you belongs to
the one and only one singular image
Oh God...
Author notes
Prompt...
"This has got to die. This has got to stop. This has got to lie down. With someone else ontop." Damien rice.- Elephant.
In a list
A contest entry
- A saturday with Gibran Khalil Gibran~(12hours contest) by Amarige.
700 points, ended February 4, 2008, 11 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Do you still forget the breeze? by forbidden-colour.
300 points, ended May 17, 2008, 28 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Great read!
Thank you for entering.
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BRAVO, CONNECTION ALL OF US AWARE OR NOT AWARE WE ARE STILL CONNECTED BY THE HOLY SPIRIT, WHAT YOU KNOW I TOO KNOW YET WE HAVE NEVER MET OUR FEELINGS TOWARDS OUR CREATOR ARE THE SAME, WE ARE NOT THE SAME RELIGION, WE ARE NOT OF THE RACE, WE HAVE DIFFERENT LIFE STYLES. BUT OUR THOUGHTS ARE THE SAME, PERHAPS WRITTEN DIFFERENTLY BUT WITH THE SAME MEANING, THE SAME PASSION, THE SAME LOVE, HUMANITY IS INDEED CONNECTED TO THE SPIRIT, ONE SPIRIT THAT IS WHO WE TRULEY ARE, WE ARE ONE WITH THE SPIRIT.EXCELLENT POETIC GENIUS.GOD BLESS
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Bravo!
My dear PDK, This is one of your best!
It is perfect to read and the picture is outstanding with the words... I wish I could make everyone on earth read this wonderful poem. Bless You, Jane
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Forgot to applaud you!
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Wonderful poem, best of luck in the contest
Amarige -
a really beautiful poem, especially :
"...and we all are lingering to
betoken you
In the dissimilar images ..."
amen, my friend, amen. thanks.
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I....am not a religious person, but I can appreciate true spirituality when I see it. I kind of like your word choice, it seems so smooth, I mean your poem can be described by one of your words: lingering. It sort of flows out, and stays with you long after being read. Interesting way of beginnign and ending your poem. At first, it's as if you are addressing God, then at the end, its as if you are beseeching him. How marvelous.
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I have one word for this...a word I have only recently learned...'Om'...a near equivalent, from my own faith, would be 'Amen'...the tolerance and peace of Indian spirituality is so rich in your words...a flavor of Khalil Gibran enhanced through your own...Well done. Best of luck in the contest. Peace, Rhonda
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