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Powerless To Say Goodbye.

Your look was most tender as you asked me to dance
I knew I was hooked from that very first glance,
your smile, your hello was music to my ears
as I dreamt we'd be together for many a year.

We danced under moonlight, kissed under the stars
two heartbeats together, we'd never be afar
making wishes upon the ocean so vast
as I silently pleaded for this time to last.

Moments so precious imprinted on my heart
these memories for me will always be a part
the laughter, the love of the two of us here
as time seemed to stand still I saw the future so clear.

Too quickly came the last dance and kiss
and I knew in my heart there was something amiss,
tears flowed silently as we said our goodbyes
yet these feelings I have I surely cannot deny.

My ship is achored to yours and I can't seem to shift
sailing upon oceans of loneliness is where I now drift
as I peer from the mast for a last glimpse of you
once more the tears flow in my ocean of blue.







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SITUATION I:
I just went on a cruise and I met this guy. He was really great but I only had about 6 days with him because he lives far away. That's pretty much what my mind wants to revolve around at the moment. From hello to first dance to first kiss to last dance to last kiss to good-bye and everything in between, my mind is just stuck.

(I) Option One: write a poem about not being ready to say good-bye

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  • TooRainbow silver member
    February 4, 2008

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    Beautiful imagery! You really make your readers feel the longing! Great job and good luck in the contest!
    Sheryl


  • xBluexEyedxGirlx
    February 2, 2008

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    Omg I can't even begin to explain how true that is.
    Like seriously, were you there, were you watching me! jk.
    Great job!


  • x-Black-Butterfly-x gold member
    February 2, 2008

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    this is such a powerful write and i loved the way you dripped this with emotion. well done gran and best of luck


  • Aussie Gypsy gold member
    February 2, 2008

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    Another gorgeous write, you certainly do have love on the brain, and it shows so beautifully in this one... gorgeous. Goodluck in the contest

    Karen