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Heart of A Dream Catcher

Missing image
If I could have that too -
a heart, not of glass but
of brilliance; contained,
flowing with love, adjacent
a dream, about to be captured.

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  • Naridill
    February 9, 2008

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    Flowing and a calm, beautiful response to picture, very intriguing and uplifting piece.

    Thanks for entering,


  • secberm
    February 5, 2008
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    I've read this more than a couple of times. And it's beautiful. But heart and love... I feel numb to those words. LOL I hate to appear bitter (believe me, I'm FAR from it) but I'm still emotionless. All I can think is "Aww..." and "That's cute." Maybe it's MY heart that's grown cold. LOL Good luck, love. One.

    Dez


    • LadyLavender gold member
      February 6, 2008
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      Thankyou Dez for the comment. Have been out-of-commission due to the flu. Feeling better now.


  • Mallig gold member
    February 2, 2008

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    This is so beautiful! I can't tell you how much this wonderful poem touched my heart. Best of luck in the contest!

  • Yvette Champ gold member
    February 2, 2008

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    Liked the title very much,it was a perfect introduction,what a lovely wish,for a heart of brilliance,beautiful imagery, I wondered whether you had perhaps considered this poem without the usage of adjacent and omitting the word about? Not a criticism but I learn from the answers to my curiosity and am a curious girl or should that be a girl that is curious or both lol


    • LadyLavender gold member
      February 2, 2008
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      Yvette, even if it were constructive critism, I'm open to that too. SMILE (especially from you). OK, let me explain. The protganist in the poem is showcasing the weakness of a glass heart (it being fragile). But, light and wisdom can strengten the ability to love ( without fear). The adjacent is what is infront of her, something wonderful that because of the aforesaid, their is now the fortitude to captured what has always been longed for.

      • Yvette Champ gold member
        February 2, 2008
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        Dearest poetess, that's one of the many reasons that you are,indeed,a lady You have the intrinsic ability to understand light and love, you write of it, you exude it and openly recieve it. Thankyou for taking the time to enlighten me, both your explanation and yourself are appreciated.


  • Musimwa
    February 2, 2008
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    gREAT

    Wonderful poem. It is really striking. I love it. U have kept it so short.


  • PrabhuDayal Khattar gold member
    February 2, 2008

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    of brilliance; contained,
    flowing with love, adjacent
    a dream, about to be captured.

    you have touched the beauty of the soul here and brought into the wonderful poetry my friend..well done....

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