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Farmyard Fun




I feel like a pig.

Bloated from my force-feed of human surplus,
Unable to stand under my own power,
Weighed down with excess and redundance.

I feel like a chicken.

One of a million, clawing desperately for my share,
Denied anything more than the norm,
Choking on those around me.

I feel like a sheep.

A product of perversion, crafted from history,
Thoughtless and puerile in a sea of mediocrity,
Atrophied by my inadequacy.






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For the contest: 'How are you feeling?' ...I decided against writing about my headache, and decided on a more 'the-world-is-a-pit-of-hideous-filth' approach

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  • mikepattonisgod
    February 11, 2008
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    Heh :-) 'atrophied by my inadequacy'. Stupid sheep.


  • Sf
    February 6, 2008

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    Lol... I don't think thats what they meant by 'How are you feeling?... this is quite random and absolutely brilliant...


  • FalopianTube
    February 4, 2008

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    I feel like a pig. Haha. OMG... after a long, boring ass day of work, that line made me giggle.

    Your poems are so freaking random but I love them.

    But.. okay... I don't get it... how is a sheep a product of perversion? idk. I think it's just your use of gigantic words that I do not understand at this particular time in my life. Muwahah!

    I like how you bring your feelers back to animals... ahhh!!!


  • wondering.willow
    February 4, 2008

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    Great Job

    I am the judge of the contest.
    thanks so much for entering!
    This is a great poem. Your input
    on life, is truly amazing,
    and putting it in a way of reality.
    Its just amazing!
    thanks again,
    aj

  • Dobar Dan
    February 2, 2008
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    Good Luck

    The world is beautiful if we look beyond the filth - I like the way you structured this poem - the message is great too - we can relate to the animal world for sure - we eat like pigs - scratch like chickens - follow like sheep - drink like fish - etc. etc. etc. - keep on keeping on - Bless God - Joe


  • grannyeri gold member
    February 2, 2008

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    Quite a unique take on the prompt question - how do you feel. Do think it is much better than writing about a headache, for sure. Liked the title too.

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