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Vampire For Hire (Chapter two)

--Chapter two--
  The Trail


Mr grin walked up to the big bouncer who was at the door checking ID's
He pulled out a picture of Casey and asked if he had seen her before. The bouncer didn't even look at the picture, "No!" he said
"Well then do you mind if I ask inside to see if any others have seen her?"
The bouncer was snobbish again, "hey buddy, I said No! now get out of my face!"
Mr grin pressed on, "Listen, I Have to know if anyone has seen this girl within this club!"
The big bouncer turns toward Mr grin looks down at him  pressing his two fingers hard against his chest "This is the last time I'm going to tell you! Get fucking lost!"
Mr grin looked up at the bouncer as a smile stretched across his face.
And in that instant,

                      CRASHHH!!!

The bouncers body crashes through the front window of the night club, and Mr grin walked in like nothing happened, brushing bits of broken glass off his shoulder. The bouncer was on the ground knocked unconscious.
Mr grin walked inside the nightclub and overlooked the many people on the dance floor. The music was loud and booming. Mostly trance Techno music type. Inside he saw a bald headed bartender who had piercings and tattoo's all over his body. Mr Grin approached him.
"What will you have buddy?" The bartender asked, Mr Grin takes out the photo of Casey, and asks him if he has seen her before.
The bartender poured a shot of vodka in a small shot glass and gulped it down and said, "Take a hike buddy!!"
"Just look at this picture please! Don't make me have to ask you again!" The bartender asks "You a cop?
Mr Grin replied, "Do I look like a cop?"
"No, you look like a faggot!" The bartender said loudly
I see this is going to be difficult Mr Grin thought.
He leaped over the bar facing the bartender, the bartender took out a large blade "You are messing with the wrong guy asshole! He tried stabbing him but Mr grin was too fast. The vampire grabbed his arm that held the knife, Bent it backwards breaking it, the bartender screamed in agony. He then took the knife from his hand and slammed his other hand on the bar as he staked it deeply with the knife. The bartender tried to get free but It was painful and impossible to get it out.
Mr grin put the photo of Casey on the bar and made the bartender look. "I will ask one more time, Have you seen this girl?!"
"Ok Ok ok, argghhhh yes fuck! s, sh, she was with the club owner last time I saw her! The owner of this joint is upstairs!"
"Thank you" Mr Grin said
The vampire walks through the crowded dance floor. And it felt like slow motion. The many people on the dance floor parted and made way for him as he walked through. He was charismatic and beautiful to look at. They admired him.
A lot of them were dressed in Gothic clothes, heavy make-up,  Piercings all over their face. Some even wore fangs, because they admired vampires so much.
But Mr Grin laughed saying to himself, nothing but wannabe's and imitators.
Finally, He reached a flight of steps that led to where the owner was but he was stopped by a gaurdsman. "Sorry, but Mr Price isn't seeing anyone at this moment."
"I have an important matter to discuss with this Mr Price.
The guard spoke, "I think you better leave buddy!"
Mr grin reaches for the door knob but the gaurdsman took out his gun And threatened him , "If you don't leave now, I am going to fill you with bullets!" He aims the gun at Mr Grin.
A smirk grew over his face.
Grabbing his gun with blinding speed, dismantling it in four different directions
He grabbed the gaurdsman by His shirt and slammed him against the wall
"I have no quarrel with you, I only wish to speak with the owner!"

The vampire drops him, and tells him "Your shift is done, go home!" The frightened gaurdsman runs off. 

The vampire uses his strength ripping the door open with ease.
The owner was surprised along with 3 naked women
The vampire tells them to leave.  "I'm only here for the owner!"
The women ran out. It was him and the owner now.
"What the hell do you want?!!" I want to know what happened to this girl?" He shows a picture of Casey.
"I never seen her before!" the owner yells.
Mr Grin backhands him then slams him to the floor face down. He grabbed his arm and twisted it behind him. "This is not what I heard!" Then he grabbed one of his fingers breaking the first one. The owner yelled out loud in pain.
Again the vampire shows the picture to him
"Have you seen this girl!"
The owner says fuck off! The vampire grabs another finger and breaks it. The owner screams in pain The vampire says, "look, I can do this all night, is this what you want? Now tell me...have you seen this girl?!"
"y,yes yessss I have seen her!" as he presses the owner's head to the ground, "Argghhh ok ok I'll talk!" Mr Grin eased off a bit.

"She's at East Pine street, the address is 666, she is there. They have a deep underground secret area where they keep the girls for sex. Their all locked up in a room! Its heavily guarded! You'll never make it through!" he laughs

"You are a part of this sick trend! I am here to balance out the equation, I am equilibrium, I am the punisher! I despise what you are! Therefore I sentence you...To death!"
"No no no please I told you everything. I told you every...*Snap*" The vampire ends his life breaking his neck.

He walks again through the dance floor, thinking, knowing, that he is up against many. But he is more than looking forward, to the challenge and carnage soon at hand.
He enters the limo sits in the back "Edward, we have a new destination to get to. It is there where we will find the girl. Take us to 666 East pine street."
"Yes sir, right away!"
They drive off 


(To Be Continued)

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  • SoxxDisastrous
    February 10, 2008

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    Wow, this is really powerful. Your writing is quite impressive. I’m looking forward to reading more!


  • A Lonely Soul
    February 2, 2008
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    Oh this was really cool hun, I really enjoyed reading it. I hope it don't take to long for the next piece to be written. I can see I'm going to be hooked and anxious to see what you come up with. Overall the story is so far very good, but you do need to fix the punctuation in it. It got all messy near the end, so yeah it'd be nicer if you could fix that. Any way, continue the amazing work!
    Much love always *hugz*
    ~~Tori~~


  • Starshine on me
    February 1, 2008

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    Awsome!!

    I know that this is a work in progress. So I will do a little editing for you. Lol Check your capitalization. Casey's name for example. Guardsmen may be better as gaurdsman as there is only one of them. And I think you need to check the tense of your verbs when the guardsman is taking out his gun. he takes out gun and aims it. present tense not past. cause it is happening now.


    • Immortal Flesh
      February 1, 2008
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      That is exactly why I needed to talk to you about so I deeply deeply appreciate your help!!!!! Thank you so much, and please if you see something that is out of place or doesn't seem to make sense please let me know. I am open for an suggestions and help!!!
      Thank you thank you!the third chapter is going to get really ugly. he is going to kill A lot of bad guys the Third chapter is called "Redemption" it's going to be awesome, I can't wait till its done!!