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The Secret Garden

The secret garden,
behind the door,
the enchanted round door,
Underneath the entwined ever-growing ivy,
Deep, beaming green,
Beyond the thick wooden oak door,
Is a secret garden
An eden,
A paradise,
The flowing stream,
Rapid, clear blue water,
Glistens under the sunshine,
Green, green grass,
Sways gently with the wind,
Oh, how I wish,
I could go to a place like this.

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  • SweetRoses
    July 28

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    I want to go to a place like this too. It sounds so wonderful. A perfect paradise. Wonderful write.


  • Rovingone gold member
    June 16

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    I can just see that garden with it's heavy oak door keeping out the intruders, keeping he grass sily and waving in the breeze, and the chrystal blue stream flowing through. What a place it must be.


  • Amazira
    April 10

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    Enter at your own risk

    into the land of starry eyed fantasy
    for thouest may never knowest
    the adventures that may bring
    and the poems that may flowest


  • garbait
    March 12

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    Sounds like my kind of garden.
    I do hope there are tomatoes there though. I do love tomatoes.

  • Candy6
    March 9
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    This is a beautiful poem. Beautiful descriptive imagery.


  • GreenHrtPaleMoon gold member
    March 5

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    Excellent imagery. I found the entire thing to be a very beautiful picture in my head. And the ending added the sense of fantasy and imagination to it. The only thing I would question is the use of the word door. Three times may have been a little too many. Remember there are other similar terms such as "portal, gate, etc." This peace was fun to read.


  • Poetry-and-rhyme
    February 23

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    oh sis this is such a great write the descriptions the imagery just rockssss
    love you works dear keep it up

  • Aesca
    February 21

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    When you go, could you leave the door unlocked so I can join you? It sounds like a pleasant place to be.

  • Puppydog gold member
    February 16

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    EVER SO BEAUTIFUL!!!

    As I read I see in my mind that beautiful garden from the story Secret Garden.


  • Xx Scarlet Dove xX
    February 4
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    Oh I love this!!! Very well done...


  • first forgotten
    February 2
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    you have a vivid imagination and i love it! your work is so colorful and rich.

  • Piccola gold member
    February 2

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    this is rich with imagery and you let the reader come in to a fantastic world with you and see through your eyes. Nice job.

  • RainbowGirl257
    February 2
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    thanks, it was inspired by the image on the Enchanted realm page

  • i-love-my-bra
    February 2

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    mmmm

    i wanna go too now, i realy like line 5 where it says beaming green cos that reminds me of a searchlight, that can't find the garden, but i think maybe "green, green grass" could have been made a slightly bit more interesting. on teh whole xxx je loves it and since u always complain that i dont comment or give you my preciaous applauses, for this great work have 3.


  • Ja Devalesa
    February 1
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    I wish I could too. Reminds me of the book...called The Secret Garden. What do you know?

  • x-Black-Butterfly-x silver member
    February 1

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    this is beautiful and i closed my eyes just toimage the pretty scene. a beautiful and imaginative write

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