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I'll die for saying "I love you"

Broken by the storm
  this ship is ready to fall
  deep in the abuse of Lethe

Just like a plane with no wings
  this soul can not fly up in the sky
  [maybe if you were there, it might]

The times I looked into your eyes I can't forget
it felt so real, the flame in your eyes
   it almost burned me

I think I fell for you that time

 

And oh how violently I fell, right from the sky

and on my way down [rushing through the clouds]

all I kept thinking was that when I'd land, I'll be with you

   that's just how much I loved you

 

Right from the sky

The flame burning in your eyes

 

Could it all have been just an illusion?

A bittersweet dream that day chased away?

  Can you ever really feel love, afterall?

  We are too selfish a species to admit so

 

"I love you" were the words that could save me

  and you were anxious to let me die

  you're the one that killed me tonight 

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  • first forgotten
    February 2, 2008

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    thats so beautiful it hurts. i wish mine could have saved me too. i feel your pain, and i;m sorry for it. but it creates vivid words that you've expressed so well.

    • Latradi
      February 3, 2008
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      Thank you very much

      It's sad when people can relate to this kinf of words but I feel your compation and I thank you for your kind words


  • Electric Sunrise gold member
    February 2, 2008

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    The title was enough to captivate me. The poem, pure brilliance, such beautiful and sensual imagery and such a brilliant and powerful theme, the ugliness of humanity, and yet, some beauty to it too. Nicely done

    • Latradi
      February 2, 2008
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      Thank you for your comment... I'm really glad you liked it.. This one is actually me trying to write something like dirty pretty.. but I think I failed. LOL
      Thanks anyway..
      Latradi