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Twinkle, twinkle little star

"Twinkle, twinkle little star"
The flame of the candle begun to sang

Dancing in the wind of the eternal change
the waters of the earth combined in flame

"How I wonder what you are"
the voice of the flame continued the guitar
singing the song of the little star

No wrong, or harm it could have ever done
something of such beauty and something so bizarre

"Up above the world so high"
nothing there can ever hide

Rare in colours and in style
that's what makes it so divine

"Like a diamond in the sky"
your bright light is my guide

Mesmerised by the lie
of the liquid fire inside

 

What a deceiving desire 

A candle lit in water fire 

Author notes

This is about things that are deceiving, about beautiful lies

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  • Tarja
    February 1, 2008
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    Beautiful lies huh.... I have had my share of those told to me. But yes this was great. It went very well with the picture... you took it in another direction than I expected but I enjoyed it. Thanks so much for entering, I loved the flow, though the rhyming seemed a bit forced at times, overall this was fantastic. Good luck.

    • Latradi
      February 2, 2008
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      Thank you very much for your comment, I appreciate the constructive criticism. Welldone on the contest idea, it was really inspiring.