~~*My Shotonig Stra*~~
As I loko upno teh stralti syk
I ees yuor loev shninig brhigt
I kepe yuor lvoe wtihni my suol
wappred caerfluly wtihni stardns
fo slivre adn godl
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I fele yuor lvoe flaot dwon ot em
uopn teh whsieprs fo na ehtreael bereze
ni teh mdist fo a wnitrse ngiht
yuor tnedre wodrs hlod
em tgith
*****
Trehe si on drak conrer
yuor lvoe dnot shnie
wihtin thsi cairng herat fo mnie
wihtin the siklen strnads fo tmie
tow suols bodned beacme
intretwiend
*****
Thuohg yuor lvoe tarvles fmro afra
wtihni teh ngiht syk yuo rae
ym shotonig stra
~~*My Shooting Star*~~
As I look upon the starlit sky
I see your love shining bright
I keep your love within my soul
wrapped carefully within strands of
silver and gold
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I feel your love float down to me
upon the whispers of an ethereal breeze
In the midst of a winters night
your tender words hold
me tight
*****
There is no dark corner
your love don't shine
within this caring heart of mine
within the silken strands of time
two souls bonded became
intertwined
*****
Though your love travels from afar
within the night sky you are
my shooting star
A contest entry
- IF YUO CNA RAED THSI WIRTE ME A PEOM by XxGoldenxXDawnxX.
360 points, ended February 22, 2008, 11 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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OH wow.. I love it the right way round and mixed up. It truly is great to read things like this. Well done.
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Thank you so much for your lovely comment
and the silver, I really enjoyed this.
~sugar~
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brilliat aunty Chelle, thought you had forgot to spell check lol.
Love MJ
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love this the parts my ass could read
you are unstopable woman!!! love you
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LOL!!! juju. it's a good job I did a translation.
I found it easy to read it is usually how I spell before I use spell check
Love you ~sugar~
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That is just so beautiful! I felt like I wanted to be there and feel and see everything you described. It was hard to read the first version, though I did get through it. English isn't my first language, so I don't think I'll be able to ever write like that. Anyway, the poem is beautiful and I really enjoyed it!
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All I did was muddle the letters up, thank you for reading glad you enjoyed it
~sugar~
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Indeed, very very creative. Very beautiful words. Wonderful imagery and flow to the piece too. It is very cleverly-written. Well done Sugar.
Much love
Wayne
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Thanks hon, for your lovely comment.
Love ~sugar~xx
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The creative thoughts of Poet. ~ Still as good as the first time
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Thanks Lovable
~sweetness~
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Pretty
Very pretty poem, sis. This is how I feel about my beloved Jammi. Fine work.
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Cheers bro
I hope all is well with you and Jammi
Appreciate you reading
~sugar~
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Nice trick, but I got it all on the first look, didn't even have to read the bottom part. Sometimes you are so funny, but you know some people would have stopped at the first line.
It doesn't matter, a lovely write and a lovely read.
Must be nice to be snow-bound, huh?
I love you,
Brazos
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It hasn't developed into the blizzard they forecast so far it has been more hail with a few flakes of snow. PHEW! and high winds.
Glad you enjoyed this B it was fun to do, I like funny it makes people smile.
Love ~sugar~
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LOL!!! this was crazy, I think I had it at first and was saying to myself, WHAT THE H*LL!!??? Then I saw the contest. Very creative Sweetness
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LOL!!! That's what I thought when I read my friends, I thought he had gone mad and not used spell check
Appreciate and value you reading
~sweetness~
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Lovely shooting star sis
at first, I thought Ide took too much for pain today but I understood once I proceeded into your lovely write here. Great loved it.
Pif♥
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LoL!!! You make me
Thanks sis, always appreciate you reading
I would have been screaming use spell check next time
Lubb you ~sugarcookie~
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