I heard you were down
I wish I was in town
To make you laugh and be happy
I would try to make it snappy
I want to dance for you
So you're not blue
I would make faces and stuff
But if that's not enough
I would juggle and dance
You would smile with a glance
You would no longer be sad
You might even be glad
To be as happy when you see
How you make us be so happy
Author notes
My goal is to make people smile with this one please tell me if it works...
A contest entry
- Thinking of you mommy by Sunshine Princess.
1000 points, ended February 11, 2008, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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yes definitely.... it did make me smile... it a sweet little poem that touches ones soul or whatever part that makes us smile. its beautiful
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wow, as always it takes me a while to get a comment to you. if you did dance for me, I think that I could be happy, I''m not 100 percent on that, but it's worth a shot right?
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I smiled, great rhyme and definantly happy.Should do well in the contest.
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made me smile
you always seem to find the right things to say...
you could bring a smile to anyones face...
miss you gurlie you should call some time ill be home...
<3's
te quiero
Stacy Kay
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VERY CUTE!!!!
Reading this would brighten up anyones day.
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Excellent little rhyme there, loved it! It's a happy one, it is! Excellent work!
I'll have to come by and give it another read the next time I'm feeeling blue.
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I smiled
really sweet write
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This is cute and full of humor. You made me smile! You dance and juggle at the same time..very talented indeed! Uplifting read, lovely..thanks for sharing
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well, I sort of smiled... does that count???
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thank you for the clappy hands...
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yeah, clappy hands are good. I like them, they look silly.
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i like it its cute.. and it kinda reminds me of the days when we would chill at your place and dance around and act stupid together and not even care lol
<3 ya
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yeah back in the day...
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Gorgeous poem, I'm sure it worked!
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i thought it was cute
brought a smile to my face..SMILES
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This is really sweet and it did make me smile thank you for thinking of me and goodluck to you in Genna's contest much love
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LOL I am sure this will make her smile.
this was very fun and sweet
Delila
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This is a nice pome for my mommy thank you for writing it for her have a nice day today love Genna
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this is too cute. it did its job, I have a smile from ear to ear...good luck in the contest
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aww this is cute. the rhyme is a little simplistic but it works for it. your goal was achieved! [you made me smile] lol nice write!
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It certainly made me smile and with any luck it will make aunty CJ smile too. Thank you so much for entering, the very best of luck to you. Could I please ask you to change the yellow font though as I have problems reading it. Many thanks xxxxxx
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Changed the color is it a little better?
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Much, Thank you very much
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