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Mysterious Rose

I watched him walk our dead end street
to the end of the cobble stone
A neighbor that I've yet to meet
who lives all alone

He had a shovel in his hand
his other carried a pail
He left his footprints in the sand
that turned into a trail

He goes there most every morn
with a burlap sack
Today I saw his shirt was torn
with scratches on his back

We followed his print upon the ground
to the end of the trail
I trembled at the sight we found
a shovel and a pail

I didn't think she saw me
but the sheriff said she knows
I didn't think that she would see
I grew her a rose

Author notes

the world is not black and white but shades of grey

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  • black hearted rebel
    April 20
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    Awwwwwwe what an awesome sweet write!I absolutely love it!Thank you very much for the entry!


  • cricketjeff gold member
    March 22

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    A very enjoyable tale with a delightful twist, the rhyme and meter both good and the story holds the reader to the end.

    Great stuff and we both thank you for the entry

    Jeff and Sue


  • RatherImaginative silver member
    November 2, 2008
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    This is an intriguing narrative. It is bittersweet, and you've done a wonderful job drawing out the suspense. However, the last stanza confuses me a little. Who is the speaker? The old man, or the narrator of the poem? Thanks so much for entering my contest!

    • bluecollarlove
      November 3, 2008
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      I'll tell you if you tell me

      First. The speaker in the last stanza is the man.Now, my question.What made you think he was an old man.


  • LadyOfFate
    February 23, 2008
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    very nicely done. you forgot the saying I requested. please put it somewhere on this page, comments or notes I don't care which, I rather not disqualify you or anyone else. so please add it. thank you. it is a good piece. thanks for writing it. and good luck


  • bananasfoster42
    February 19, 2008
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    interesting take on the picture! thanks for the entry!


  • girl shaman
    February 18, 2008

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    hunnie
    i asked for no rhyme :/
    but well i read this anyway and i feel you know its not half bad.
    but really.. read through the whole thing first k?

    • bluecollarlove
      February 20, 2008
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      Sorry.Would you mind if I replace it.It does make me smile that a non lover of rhyme said it's not half bad.Maybe I didn't really waste your time.

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