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Fading

At touch..
Soul blackens..
Face crumbles..
And existence soon
will disappear

Like paper through fire

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thanks for the suggestion sulfane! i love it!

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  • Owl33
    March 29, 2008

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    If I am not way off I would say this is a dark look at love? Very straight forward non-sugar coated writing. Nice work!


  • crimsondew
    February 1, 2008
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    Like the imagery here


  • plainoljoe
    February 1, 2008

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    "and from the ashes there will come a better day"---

    a quote and promise from "ride my seesaw" by the Moody Blues worth a listen!!!


  • Naridill
    February 1, 2008

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    Simple but stunning - reflective imagery.
    One suggestion [?] 'paper through fire'

    Thanks for entering,