Kiss me! Lie to me, tell me you love me. Hold me tight, when someone else should be in my place. Cuddel with me while you stay the night. I wounder if she's having a bad night. don't lave i know it's morning but please babe stay. Let's go one more round before she calls. Your mine and she can't have you. So don't think about leaving, or else i'll kill you. If i can't have you no one else can!
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Desperate and daunting....expand it and make it longer....Max
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FREAKY!
Also you need to use more emotion in you poetry. You should stop obsessing over this one and get over it. I sense a great lack of feeling in your poems. I advise you to get good, fast. -
this makes me so happy
it reeks of human nature
god it's brilliant
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You remind me of the Corpse Bride
She was beautiful too. We all can be selfish but it takes a beautiful person to realize it. If I see a blossom of butterflies I will think of you. I know how it feels when you want someone who can never love you. It's dissolving to the heart and soul but it sort of makes you stronger if you can fight past it. I fell in love with this one person but in order to stop a lovers triangle before it started I had to stop these thoughts for them. I knew this person could never love me. But when I came to the realization that it could never be I stopped it right there. When this person got nasty with me for no reason one time I tried to avoid them. I hadn't seen them for a while after that. Because I didn't want to hurt myself and because I didn't want to hurt them or their partner I had to repress my feelings and give up being selfish. I mean I have a tendency to falter and fantasize about someone I'll never have but I try to make mental amends. Others do it to me. Others try to force me to love them. Why do what you don't like done to you? I may feel love for them in a small sense. Some place in my heart I might hold a fragment of a dream for them but my heart is with another. Someone who can give me what I need. I know I'm getting totally off the subject but don't love out of repressed hate but don't love out of guilt either.... oh sorry I forgot to put this... my dad makes me say it every time I go off in a rant.... "Please mister speaker may I please have a rant!" Okay, got that out of the way.
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wow! That is strong, I guess you should be the victor in all of this. How I see this is more yearning, a win at all cost situation, no-one wants to mess with.
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This so makes sense if i cant have you no one else can i love it
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