I never stray from thoughts of thee,
That breathless flow on Summer’s night.
And though the sun is sinking low,
My world within sings starry bright.
I come on bended knee to thee,
Through distance measured, not in feet,
On treasured wings of soul, hear how
My golden memories sing Sweet.
The present moment slips, so faint,
I surf an ever flowing stream -
Soar through bright skies and distant time,
In out-of-body - mind of dream;
Mood music moves without complaint,
Soft waves wash time in time with heart,
To will my mind to meld with thine,
Our substance held in shadow art!
We tumble ‘round like wind-blown grass,
Such love, my love, shall never fail!
Though tears may fall - no sweeter rain
Could brighten up what once seemed pale.
Can rainbow colors last ? - alas !
Pearlescent glow - first slow then fast.
Repeat through time, then time again,
Create what some said could not last!
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A contest entry
- Romance by Frodofan.
600 points, ended February 9, 2008, 18 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Memories by Rovingone.
900 points, ended June 13, 2008, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Wonderful imagery, a nice piece.
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Perfection in poetry
How sweet the thought were as I read this classic love poem. I envy anyone who can put my mind in this mood and squeeze my heart in sweet embrace. Best wishes in the contest. It's a winner in my book!
Sincerely,
Leo Long
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At last!
At last someone seems to grasp what I had in mind. I do have to say that "Orgasmic flow" was kind of... ugly compared to the rest of the poem. It sort of degraded the whole thing. Perhaps you can find a less blunt description???
The brackets also irk me as they should be parenthese if anything. Brackets are meant to show when something has been omitted.
Besides those two things, thank you so much for being the first person to really grasp - or should I say - just be plain nice enough to enter what the contest asks for!
A lovely piece. Good rhythm, nice rhymes, nice sentiment. Very pretty love poem. And it even has form.
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A beautiful romantic poem in classic style--excellent content, rhyme and flow.
Bill
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What a beautiful loving piece.It has that olde world feel to it .it may be the use of curtain words that give that feeling It works well with the poem Excellent Good luck in the contest
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