Treasured one, will you not look upon what I have bought you?
Such luxuries even the Pharaohs could not have seen
Can you not behold the prize that I offer you?
You will sit on this pedestal in the name of love
This crystal shrine is yours alone
Unmatchable in beauty and in subtly grace
Unsurpassed and unparalleled, do you not appreciate
This treasure that is your world?
Be free, sweet darling, and explore your universe
Discover those smooth, delicate walls
No need to thank me, precious heart
But you do anyways, and rise to the surface
Belly up
In a list
A contest entry
- Ray Caesar - digital art inspiration #44 by leander.
400 points, ended February 8, 2008, 6 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Critical comments, please. And if you PEEK, SPEAK!
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The last stanza of this poem is the one I like the best of this - though the first two aren't bad at all either
I had a little laugh with your teacup thingie
lol 
Thank you for entering the contest - I wish you the very best!
Leander -
great job
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oh i really like this one. death by overprotection. it's a painful reality.
the picture is super cool too. lol
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Very interesting. I like the story you weave. This seems to kind of jump out at you with all the alliteration and hyperbole. Well done. Although, I didn't really get how it related to the Ray Caesar contest. But, to each his(or her) own. Good luck in the contest. Cheers.
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Thanks for the thumbs up!
If you look at the contest pic real closely, there is a fishbowl sitting on the the floor
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Huh- and now that I look even closer, it seems that it is a teacup. Well then. My bad...
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