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Refrains

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I whittle words to pass each quiet hour,
rhythmic memories, lapping gentle waves;
forgive the city - starving dreams - devour
wondrous, fragile heartbeats for heartache craves.
Dark roasted beans brew beneath high tower;
traffic lights dance to pedestrian braves;
up-town calls down-town taxis deliver
and you, and I, dared such dreams forever.

Exotic stories in our sails lent breeze,
afternoons carried off - finest places:
From waltzing balconies to cresting seas,
falling beat of jungle heat - painted faces.
As curtains remained closed in morning tease,
we mapped our journey in tender traces
for welcomed warmth against November rains -
watch love replayed in symphonic refrains.

The sunrises, sets casting silhouettes;
reflections combine words untouchable;
ripples disturb waters - one wish forgets
this bay, for me and you, achievable.
But cross-town traffic breathes dead end regrets
up-town boys with their yachts affordable –
diamonds on silk sorrow spent tomorrow;
time to set sail -  I have dreams to follow.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

Ottava Rima

A Ottava Rima is a poem written in 8-line octives. Each line is of a 10 or 11 syllable count in
the following rhyme:

one octive poem. abababcc
two octive poem. abababcc, dededeff
three octive poem. abababcc, dededeff, ghghghii



Image" The Studio Boat by Claude Monet

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  • klassy lassy
    August 10

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    The meter in this is like music, and I'm so impressed with those who can hear and write it and move in the currents with such grace. I'm caught in the words and yet am in that place where "reflections combine words untouchable;" so I cannot (touch it, I mean).

    The Monet is deceptively peaceful, sad in the blues and browns of yesterday, as I found the poem to be, too, in the knowlege that there is more to be had than the things that money can buy....


    • Idle Mind Wondering silver member
      August 10
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      I found this to be a wonderful form full of room for expression yet still confined in great meter.
      I can never quite decide if this is sad or not...

      thanks
  • stephenlocke
    May 1

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    Good

    What an amazing piece.
    This is so soothing and mellow it almost like a lullaby. This is not something I would normally read but this blew me away.
    Every line, every word has a purpose and together they create this magical piece.

    Thanks for posting!!!

  • trustjab
    April 30

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    wow, that was inspiring, inspiring me to write, it took me to soem quiet lil countryside rivein where I'm just sittin there fishin with my nephew tryin to forget about big city bliss... and focus on the lil things in life. Great write.


  • storiesuntold gold member
    April 20
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    Very nice work here

    I loved the poem and the pic did you do the painting its lovely as well


  • Pamela A Lamppa silver member
    February 1

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    "As curtains remained closed in morning tease,
    we mapped our journey in tender traces
    for welcome warmth against November rains -
    watch love replayed in symphonic refrains."

    These lines are brilliant and of course, touch my heart.

    But such a sad ending love.

    Loved the image and subject matter. The romance in the simpler things truly moved me. Well done. ~Pamela


  • yourbentangel
    February 1

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    Thankful

    AS far as the content of this write, I find it excellent. " I whittle words" what craftmanship you have here. The meaning behind the content to go with the picture is outstanding. To look at an image such as this one and come out with formed poetry takes alot of talent and wonderful mind and imagination. Thank you so much for posting this.

    • Idle Mind Wondering silver member
      February 1
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      Thank you angel, the boat just seemed lonely but content to me and off my imagination went . I am glad you enjoyed this. Thank you for reading and commenting.

      Ken
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