Rain from the eyes,
drop to the street.
Blackness expanding,
through each heart-beat.
Dark as my spirit,
loss of life I've felt.
Farewell was spoken,
while my heart did melt.
Hollow in my soul,
lack of time to share.
Face dressed in stone,
with regret I now bear.
Beautiful you were,
lying there in peace.
No longer shall you hurt,
now that you are deceased.
(C) Nichole A.Dustin
2/1/2008
Author notes
Dedication to my grandmother.
Quote inspired.."And the rain stains the street a darker black, I dress my face in stone because I can't go back."
A contest entry
- Ani Inspired by pixxiepoetess.
825 points, ended February 15, 2008, 8 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
My mother taught me if you have nothing nice to say don't say it at all. We are not here as pros, we are here to share our art and have fun. *grin*
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Beautiful!!!
Both sad & beautiful, while inspiring & uplifting at the same.
Such a complex conflict of emotions I felt while reading this well penned & emotional write.
Great rhythm, flow & rhyme scheme...
Another emotion filled & moving write you have here...
Well done!!!
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Incredible...
You have moved me...I don't easily get stumped for words...but I'm having an expressive problem now. This is so beautiful. I didn't flinch at all or grimace or do anything at all except enjoy this delicacy of subtle and overt memories and soul-song. I love these lines: "Rain from the eyes,
drop to the street.
Blackness expanding,
through each heart-beat." Wow...I have been meaning to return to your site for a while now. I'm glad I did. I wish you the all the best.
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That is precious! It brings up so many memories; of when my grandparents died, and lately, these past five years, so many people in my life have died. They say the older one gets the more this happens. Soon, it will be my turn, but, hey - I'm ready to be with all of those that have passed before me, including my pets. I don't want to leave those I love behind; not quite yet. I want to be a grandmother myself first, and live a while to enjoy it!
This was a lovely poem that you wrote to your grandmother! A wonderful tribute. I liked the second and the third stanzas the best. They spoke out to me and the imagery was stunning! Congrats on the trophy! -
A beautiful ode to your grandmother. Although it is sorrowful, it's an excellent take on the Ani quote. Thanks for entering, and best of luck. >pixxie<
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Beautiful in sorrow and deeply heartfelt...wonderful flow and ending...for now you know she is at peace and safely home...till you met again...hold her memory dear and smile at all the good times.
EXCELLENT IN THOUGHT AND EMOTIONS.
Best to you!
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This was very well written.. very heart felt ...good luck in the contest..
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wow, this is just really good
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Thank you for the nice comment on my poem. I am happy you enjoyed it. ~Nikki
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