I am lost
and all
alone
Adrift
on seas
of needing
With gaping wounds
to sail
and soul
I
cannot
stop
the bleeding
In brutal storms of tears
I'm tossed
My conscience
lashed
and torn
By wailing winds
which make me wish
that I
was never
born
A contest entry
- silent screams we make by moonburndcheese.
300 points, ended February 4, 2008, 34 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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I've just read a lovely poem you wrote about your partner? Hopefully you're imagining the pain. I was very proud of myself when I wrote a sad poem when I was happy. Anyway it is well written and keep on trekking.
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this is a great write i cant pick just one part to be my fav. well i thank you for entering in my contest and i enjoyed reading this
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this is just so sad
but you wote it so well
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Where there is the word; there is grace to get through.
and you should know that already, but a friendly reminder never hurt no body yet.
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Firstly - you're not alone! At the very least you've got me, the barman and a few other rowdy drunks for company
Secondly - You best not wish that! You're so talented and such a good person, I feel privileged just knowing you
Thirdly, most importanly - love the poem, especially as your venturing into different ways of setting them out. Some wonderful lines throughout but I expect nothing but perfection from you! Great job x
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If you was never born
I'd have never seen such talent - don't you dare wish something like that!
This is exeptionally well written - I have nothing to tell you that you already know - it's all brilliant!
Never ♥
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Simply put with but with such emotion you drown a sea, yet aother great write, im a big fan of your work
~Dark -
powerful emotion!
powerfully, sad emotional write! your words seem so simple, yet display such depth and emotion. very talented write! i do hope you have penned the pain away and are feeling much better. if you ever want to talk, i am here.
many blessings and *stomps
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