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ode to her

Your my baby
And I'm your man

We can wander around town
for hours with out a destination

making life our very own
sappy love movie

I'll grab you by the waist

and kiss you in the pouring rain

 

I'll give you my hoodie when your cold

even if I only have a little shirt on under

 

I'll be your knight in shining armour

when your scared or in danger 

 

Take my hand and I'll lead the way
to a place of gracious beginnings

The end of loneliness
and the start of our future

I'm not perfect

and I never claimed to be

but I will promise
to treat you like the
beautiful woman you are

and give you all I can give

I'll give you something to smile about

Respect and love

I'll never abuse you

I'll never try to hurt you

only try my best to make you happy

 

Love You Jessie




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Bones7

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  • danceswsquirrels
    April 1
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    NUMBER IS FOR ME, NOT A PLACEMENT.

  • danceswsquirrels
    March 31
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    same as previous comment

  • Timespell
    March 25

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    I think your second entry to this contest is the best of the three.

    All the best,

    ~T.S~

  • Starz of Heaven gold member
    February 29

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    This is a sweet poem to someone that you hold dear to your heart thank you for taking the time to enter this contest have a great day

  • SugarCandyKittyKat
    February 19
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    So true..touches the heart...very noble...

  • M a r l u x i a gold member
    February 16

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    Magnificent. Your words are just... capturing. You've entered quite a few poems on here, and it's hard to choose just one to pick as a finalist! You have one special girl, man. You two are definitely a fitting pair. I loved the line where you said you are not perfect and you never claimed to be. Reminds me of my love for my bff. Amazing job, as always.
    ~

    Thanks for entering my Valentine's Day contest, and good luck!

    M a r l u x i a

  • Elavina
    February 7

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    AAHHHHHH!!!

    So sweet and (sniff) it brings tears to my eyes (sniff) I love this poem and I hope you and yours find happiness. So pretty and charming, she's lucky. . .

  • Chaos Inside
    February 6

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    what a snag. to treat her like u say, is amazing, not many are like that anymore. great write, gives hope to the rest of us.
    shes lucky to have you


  • knickerdew
    February 3

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    Oh Sweetheart, this is so touching and coming from such a great guy as you I know it is sincere.
    She is a lucky girl to have caught the attention of such an awesome young man.
    Many blessings to you both honey!
    ( I know this is a happy write but for some reason the tears have started up lol! )
    Love is indeed a blessing in itself and one that you deserve honey.
    Congrats


  • sweetnsassy0888
    February 1

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    the way you write is how all men should be but that's just not going to happen. i liked this poem alot, sound's to me like she has her a good guy.

  • Adios Muchachos gold member
    February 1
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    Congratulations

    That's a beautiful thing to say. Ain't love grand!


  • Jeremy0826 gold member
    January 31

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    Wow! This is great and heartfelt Brant!
    It's great to see such love and commitment
    especially from a young man such as yourself.
    Well done bro and all the best to you in life!
    Take care and thanks for sharing this one here!




    Jeremy0826

  • ears2hearyou gold member
    January 31

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    How could we resist this one?

    YOU sweet talking dog! Of course we just loved it!
    I really enjoyed the flow and bounce you put in it too!
    just one little mispelling, which I do all the time
    (big sigh) wonder above should be wander!
    wonderful job, this should melt all our hearts!
    ears2hearyou
    Kathleen/Seattle.

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