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kept promises

still teasing me as i wring your neck
u swear it was  an accident
she said he said-i dont care
i advise u to get away from here
im programmed to kill either you or myself
that poor abused girl- wish you would have kept,
your opinions to yourself
that would've helped
she might still be alive
if your promises were kept

comment honestly please

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  • RawrxXx16
    March 26, 2008

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    When you wrote "im programmed to kill either of you or myself" it reminds me of a robot. Because their programmed. This poems kind of depressing but I like it :] you write really good poetry.
    ~Hayley Mae~


  • PoetryDove
    February 23, 2008

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    I lyk this

    I think that this is what I'm feeling right now; except it's because of a movie I watched a couple nights ago. It was an "oldie" about some people in some sane asylum. It was so sad, but this sane guy came there, for no reason. But... everyone thought he was crazy. He made friends w/ this one guy named Billy, who had a really bad stuttering problem. Ummm... I won't explain all of the other stuff - 'cause it's a long story.... but, he banged this girl who snuck in there because they threw some secret party, and they all got wasted and this super mean idiotic nurse came in and was furious. The funny thing was, was that when he came out of the room with her, he stopped stuttering. But, then the nurse (whom i hate) brought up his mother and threatened to tell his mom and all of that crap, he started to stutter again. I thought it was terribly sad. He started yelling and stuff, and then they had to haul him away. He committed suicide... Then the sane guy that I was talking about literally wringer her neck. He just attacked her and... bam!

    So, that's why this reminds me of that movie.
    It's really sad

    Sorry for mumbling about random stuff, but, I really think that this is one of the best I've read from you.

    keep up the good and amazing work!

    your ap mom,
    ~ dove


  • lesbian-in-love
    February 4, 2008
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    Wow that is pretty good. Speak straight to the heart.


  • mysentimentalwings
    January 31, 2008

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    your poems speak to my youth,if only i had a friend like you when i was younger,your poems are great and this one is very thought wrenching,it really touches me.fantastic job


  • blood-dead-love
    January 31, 2008
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    Sweet. It really captures alot of emotions. Strangley it made me want to dance. Great write!!!

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