Cold air blowing
missing body
families torn apart
causing confusion
tension
utter chaos
Author notes
13 Words
Prompt: Empty Coffin
A contest entry
- Quickie PIF 10-13-13 by Cerulean.
525 points, ended January 31, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Friends, I appreciate your comments and review on this write. However, please do not add my name to your comments due to the contest rules. Thank you very much!
Comments
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Very Good
So much truth here. One could see it as a dark poem, but I see more truth...I envy your way with words - it's precise and profound. Congrats and Best Regards!
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Re:Graverobbed
Nice short prompt kind of poem, good work, Jeremy! Fine choice of words. Interesting dark subject! I like it!
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Sad yet true.. Sums it all up well
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nice. good luck to you ^^
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Ouch...this is hard hitting in brevity...very descriptive and to the point...
nice work, my friend!
mystic
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Short, but with a lot of images and impact.
Well done on the prompt.
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this is again a very short poem but very meaningful. another fantastic read, good job.
love always
erica carnea
x.x.x.x.x.x.
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Ah, an empty coffin. Always something people want not to happen. Very interesting way to write this. Nice job though.
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aww, this one is a sad one. I hate how people defile graves like this.
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Oh.. That would be very interesting and weird to go and find it empty.. Kind of gives you a creepy feeling..
Great write..
Peace to you, Jetleena
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ah that would be a crazy one, to open the coffin to say your last respects and find it gone! a good poem penned.
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Well now this happens way to often doesn't it??? So sad that we can't trust that our loved ones will be put to rest in a most repectful way anymore.....
.....Wonderful job on summing up the emotions that would follow such a happening.
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This would be a nightmare! I can't even imagine. Within such brevity, you brought that nightmare to life within this write. wow. Well done.
I wasn't expecting this and am nearly speechless.
It's good to visit you again. Best to you in the contest!
Kel
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Excellent
Oh wow!!!!!!!!!!
Oh my goodness.
This would upset me for sure.
Well done.
I wouldn't want to imagine what a family would go through, if they ever had to go through this.
It would be heartbreaking.
Keep up with the great work.
Keep on penning.
Thank you so very much for sharing.
*S* Cynthia
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What a chaotic state of affairs this would be - many times there is no body left to bury, but this sounds like the body was taken before burial even.
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WOW!! I couldn't imagine what a family would be feeling if this happened to them! However, sometimes it is happening in real life, and is then splashed all over the news. How someone could even fathom doing this to someone, and their family, it's just un-settling.. Another great use of prompt!
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Wow short and sweet and well written great job
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Great take on the prompt
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Nicely done~
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oh dear...
such a chilling scenario you have penned!!!
and the pic adds to the flavor as well...
great job with limited words...
Blessings! Tammy
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Nicely done.
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Niiiice... a great take on the prompt. So very well written. The best of luck to you in the contest. xxxx
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Deep
Very deep words here. Nice work.
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Nice job with this prompt. Well done. ~Pamela
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