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Graverobbed

 

 

 coffin 

 

 

Cold air blowing

 

       missing body

 

families torn apart 

 

causing confusion

 

tension 

 

utter chaos

 

Author notes

13 Words
Prompt: Empty Coffin

A contest entry

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  • ashjoe76
    August 29
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    Very Good

    So much truth here. One could see it as a dark poem, but I see more truth...I envy your way with words - it's precise and profound. Congrats and Best Regards!


  • poetrandy gold member
    August 14

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    Re:Graverobbed

    Nice short prompt kind of poem, good work, Jeremy! Fine choice of words. Interesting dark subject! I like it!

  • Sad yet true.. Sums it all up well
  • nice. good luck to you ^^

  • mysticstorm gold member
    July 22

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    Ouch...this is hard hitting in brevity...very descriptive and to the point...
    nice work, my friend!
    mystic


  • aboomer silver member
    July 12
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    Short, but with a lot of images and impact.
    Well done on the prompt.

  • this is again a very short poem but very meaningful. another fantastic read, good job.
    love always
    erica carnea
    x.x.x.x.x.x.

  • Ah, an empty coffin. Always something people want not to happen. Very interesting way to write this. Nice job though.


  • captain howdy
    April 19
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    aww, this one is a sad one. I hate how people defile graves like this.


  • Angelflower Greeters member
    April 5

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    Oh.. That would be very interesting and weird to go and find it empty.. Kind of gives you a creepy feeling..
    Great write..
    Peace to you, Jetleena
  • ah that would be a crazy one, to open the coffin to say your last respects and find it gone! a good poem penned.

  • jcat gold member
    April 1

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    Well now this happens way to often doesn't it??? So sad that we can't trust that our loved ones will be put to rest in a most repectful way anymore..........Wonderful job on summing up the emotions that would follow such a happening.


  • kvwriter silver member
    March 21

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    This would be a nightmare! I can't even imagine. Within such brevity, you brought that nightmare to life within this write. wow. Well done.

    I wasn't expecting this and am nearly speechless.

    It's good to visit you again. Best to you in the contest!

    Kel


  • Cynthia
    February 27
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    Excellent

    Oh wow!!!!!!!!!!
    Oh my goodness.
    This would upset me for sure.
    Well done.
    I wouldn't want to imagine what a family would go through, if they ever had to go through this.
    It would be heartbreaking.
    Keep up with the great work.
    Keep on penning.
    Thank you so very much for sharing.
    *S* Cynthia


  • grannyeri gold member
    February 23

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    What a chaotic state of affairs this would be - many times there is no body left to bury, but this sounds like the body was taken before burial even.


  • Valley Girl gold member
    February 22

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    WOW!! I couldn't imagine what a family would be feeling if this happened to them! However, sometimes it is happening in real life, and is then splashed all over the news. How someone could even fathom doing this to someone, and their family, it's just un-settling.. Another great use of prompt!


  • a dozenglassroses
    February 18
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    Wow short and sweet and well written great job

  • Cerulean gold member
    January 31
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    Great take on the prompt

  • hoodoolover silver member
    January 31
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    Nicely done~


  • Tam gold member
    January 31

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    oh dear...

    such a chilling scenario you have penned!!!
    and the pic adds to the flavor as well...
    great job with limited words...
    Blessings! Tammy


  • February Moon gold member
    January 31
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    Nicely done.


  • Anguas-Confusion gold member
    January 31

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    Niiiice... a great take on the prompt. So very well written. The best of luck to you in the contest. xxxx
  • midnightblue1272
    January 31
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    Deep

    Very deep words here. Nice work.


  • Pamela A Lamppa silver member
    January 31
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    Nice job with this prompt. Well done. ~Pamela

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