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In The Shadows Black

It crawls over skin
  Shudders at light
Quiet as death
  Whispers at night

Lives in the shadows
Black as black as black as black

It hovers above
  Haunts all your dreams
Drinks up the dark
  Feeds off your screams

Lives in the shadows
Black as black as black as black

It raises cat's hackels
  Hisses in ears
Growls in darkness
  Screeches as it nears

Lives in the shadows
Black as black as black as black

Skin as white as fallen snow
  Blood as black as sin
Eyes as red as fire's glow
  Teeth sharp to cut the skin

Lives in the shadows
Black as black as black as black

Hide all the children
  Cover their ears
Tell them "Be Silent"
  "Don't look as it nears"

Lives in the shadows
Black as black as black as black
Shadows as black as black as black
Black as black
Shadows black

Author notes

The timing may be off for a few of the lines, but the overall effect (on me, anyway) is exactly what I was going for.

Any ideas on how to make it scarier?

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  • WildMagic
    January 31, 2008

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    ooooooooohh!!!!!!

    Hehehe. I like this one too. Creepy. I don't really like the last 3 lines though, the ending could use something else