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Hard Rain

Hard rain awaits on horizon,
ready to nail the sky to earth,
captured heart sighs.

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A contest entry

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  • Naridill
    January 31, 2008

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    Love the last line - just leaves me with the stark imagery used - very enthralling and captivating.

    Thanks for entering, much luck,


  • also called
    January 31, 2008

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    shared use of photo but not insight until I read, thanks...

    collected thought

    this has a vulnerable tone from the beginning, especially in the middle and then pinned poignancy.

    It's extremely sad ending with way the singular heart gives plural sighs, as if only one unhelped possibly even. which is generative for viewing, and brings in again for me first line mention of 'horizon' as a big enough sign for some.

    well done so quickly,
    also called


  • Lady Altheia
    January 31, 2008
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    I like this. I really like the part about nailing the sky to the earth. Good luck in the contest.


  • x-Black-Butterfly-x gold member
    January 31, 2008

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    the dog no not the doggggggg -svaes the teddy and kisses it better- hehe beautiful and inspiring write mommy