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Secrets Within

Bruised and Battered
Hurt and Forgot
fake smiles hide it
But the mirror does not

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http://allpoetry.com/contest/2388735

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  • Owl33
    March 29, 2008

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    You are so great with words! I can very easily see the scenario as I had a friend who was treated very poorly at home. I worry about this pain being your own, but you are a true artist with words!


  • Naridill gold member
    January 31, 2008

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    Simple rhyme - nicely worded - short and effective. The depth shows emotions and intensity.

    Thanks for entering,