I'll be there,
When the storm clouds encircle you.
But when the rain was drowning me with tears,
Why did you not come and save my heart?
I'll be there,
When the flames of hell burn bright.
But when my pain burnt deep within,
Why were you not there to quench the fire?
I'll be there,
When the darkness is all you can see.
But when I lost my way and gave up,
Why did you not come back to turn on the light?
I'll be there,
To tell you are beautiful, worth something in the world.
But when i gave up and killed my soul in this world?
Why did you not pull me back?
I'll be there,
When you need remember our love.
But when I doubted what you truley felt,
Why were you not here, to banish my worries with a kiss?
I'll be there,
And love you forever and ever.
But they are empty words which have no meaning,
Why say them if you don't meant it?
Author notes
Option- E) ever listened to those I love you forever, I'll die without you...but been left broken and torn anyway?
Just soemthing i quickly thought about. not my best but hey who cares.
A contest entry
- But you.... by x-Black-Butterfly-x.
300 points, ended February 4, 2008, 5 entries
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Comments
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This is of course a good poem, good imagery, the usual. The thing that confused me is the message, it seems to be saying that when 'your love' is in trouble, then you'll go to help them, but give up halfway and expect them to be there for you. Isn't that selfish?
I'm probably wrong. I always am. You'll find the way that I'm wrong.
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wow
this is a very deep and emotional poem, it is really sad and full of pain, i loved it :-), it had me hooked from the first verse you are a very good poet and getting better all the time, a great poem hanna
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oh wow, this is actually a fantastic write hannah, every word was really strong and really makes the person think, it has powerful imagery in it which works really nicely and shows emotions really strongly, a very sad emotional write good luck sis
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