I'm writing you this letter
to tell you how I feel.
I want you to know I love you
and what I feel is real.
I'm putting out my hand for you
to hold tight by your side.
I'm giving you my heart and soul
my body and my mind.
I love the way you kiss me
I love your every touch.
I love you more then life itself
I love you oh so much.
There's no one in this world who can
love me like you do.
They can not make me feel the way
I feel when I'm with you.
So I've written you this letter
I've given you my heart.
I love you now and always
and have right from the start.
Years ago I could not believe
I'd be here where I am.
I'm here with you my one and only
My lover and my friend.
A contest entry
- The Face You Love Most by Shapla.
440 points, ended February 23, 2008, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Romance by Frodofan.
600 points, ended February 9, 2008, 18 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Will you be the one to catch her? by over the rainbow--x.
525 points, ended February 20, 2008, 82 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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'I've given you my heart.
I love you now and always
and have right from the start.'
This was so heartfelt [=
&& just beautiful [=
thanks for entering, good luck in my contest [=
♥
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Cute. Has a sing song feel, though actually... the meter could be refined.
For example, this line,
"I love you oh so much."
Would actually be smoother as, "I love you very much."
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A very passionate piece of writing I must say. It flows smoothly from beginning to end. I think you've to make some correction in line no 12. there I think it will be "love" instead of "live". You can correct it if you feel like.
Thanks for entering.
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Brilliant piece of writing here. The rhyme is superb. The flow is wonderful. And the emotion is heartfelt. Keep writing.
Much love
Wayne Leon
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Well done, very well structured.
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Adorable view
Painted by you,
And lucky him
Who in your thoughts he swim..
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This is an excellent write---Well structured & versed
I'm looking forward to reading more of your work as you submit them
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thanks..I really appreciate it!
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