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Say I jumped

At each fall’s end
Studied pain's nature
Deeper than deep
Lies scars of sorrows
Catalyzing every morrows
Eyeing on a triumph
No one ever won.

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I consider every fall JUST A JUMP

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  • mysticstorm gold member
    February 3, 2008

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    Wonderful words of strength and courage...for many see every fall as an excuse to stop trying...you expressed it so well and creatively...wonderful words of wisdom...
    Thank you for sharing!
    bEST


  • melphleg gold member
    January 31, 2008

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    hopeful

    Conveys some hope, but mostly despair. It ends with such a negative that the piece does not seem uplifting or encouraging. It seems to convey that something can be learned from trouble but does not state that clearly.

  • imahealer
    January 31, 2008

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    Very much like the CHinese Philosophy the every obstacle presents us with an opporetunity.Best wishes in this contest!
    Shana