Often,
I become a room devoid,
just a space
hidden behind walls,
no memories being created.
Nothing
but shadows and silence,
as if history
had forgotten that I existed,
and sometimes,
that is all I want.
A contest entry
- Quote Prompt - 20 entries by Exodus.
525 points, ended February 1, 2008, 17 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - PRE WRITE QU ICK- IES by Luminescence.
300 points, ended March 14, 2008, 64 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Anything goes. by still.she.waits.
600 points, ended April 1, 2008, 113 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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Darkness done proud, my shadow knight...
You never cease to amaze me...and I will never stop telling you, Bro, how amazing you are...Bravo
Lynfda
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i love the fact that often, is by itself, it makes everything so concrete. great writ
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WOW... very nice... I enjoyed your peice a lot. This was great.
Thank you for entering my contest and good luck in the finalists,
~lumin
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A very bleak and stark write, the black/white colours work well too. Excellent write, good luck in the contest. sj
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Alrighty,
honestly I think the line "no memories being created" didn't flow as well as the rest of the piece but the lines "as if history / had forgotten that I existed," knocked me flat on my ass. They were just stunning.
All in all I think you did a good job at showing us the quote without being too literal and obvious, which is exactly what I wanted. Thank you
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