Conflicted minds, pose certain death
Struggle and grief, is all that’s left
The dread I feel, at certain times
Pose certain death, conflicted minds
Darkness surrounds my fragile soul
Defense of thoughts, I’m sure will fold
Turmoil inside, I feel abound
My fragile soul, darkness surrounds
I stand alone, outside myself
My heart remains, upon a shelf
Hidden from view, I must atone
Outside myself, I stand alone
My eyes stay shut, from view of those
That sees me not, and still oppose
My will to live, within my gut
From view of those, my eyes stay shut
I beg of you, spare me this pain
This constant hurt, that still remain
Your vile contempt, you give in lieu
Spare me this pain, I beg of you
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#3 Heartbreak
In a list
A contest entry
- Adult Valentine Memoirs for Fantasy World Group & AP by ennovy.
950 points, ended February 3, 2008, 13 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Very deep emotions expressed...I really like this form...you made it seem effortless.
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Thank U so much - it wasn't easy lol!! Had to think through the required discipline
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Very nice swap quatrains, you did a wonderful job with this. You also brought up deep feelings of angst, and helped the reader to visulize it. Excellent job!
Thanks so much for entering our contest, and good luck.
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Thanks again -I could have sworn I thinked you. Any who thanks again
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Very lovely sweetie
I enjoy your moment like this when you just let your Muse flow like rain soft water, that embraces the ears of many. Wonderful choice of words you have selected here that created the masterpiece before us.
Good luck,
Ephiphany♥
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My pleasure thank U
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This was fantastic. It caught me and took me for a ride through your words. Great flow.
Good luck in the contest.
Soulful Woman
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Thank you for the wonderful words
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Wonderful form and excellent words to capture heartbreak. Thank you so much for entering our contest....
novy
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Thanks Mom
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