pallid coffee
and car lights reflected
through raindrops
on the cafe window
your words burned
in my heart
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For a short poem I get so much out of this. I can se her face, the Manhattan street and the entire scene unfold. Amazing I say. & thanks for the read & comment
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very nice... you put me there and then you make me feel it... nothing better in a poem.
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wow i didint think i liked short poems you changed my mind you said so much with just a few words i think thats a talent i cant do it good write
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lots of emotion here...
raw vivid imagery....
very good piece!
mike, aka jonathan wikkins -
I like this. You get across your emotions in just a short poem. I like the imagery here as well. much enjoyed!
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pallid coffee cooling, the photo creates impression of a cold night contrasting with the hot burning words
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My soul is a snowy river of beauty
flying freely in the frigid night air.
Like a living rainbow of sparkles,
moonlight illuminates every spinning crystal.
The river flows around a majestic pine.
Blue spruce picks up a mantle.
Nobody noticed my leaving.
You're on a roll, Red. Another masterpice.
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I wish I could do vignettes like this.
I hope you aren't as frozen as we are, but I suspect you are.
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Well, you don't say whether the words are happy, sad, loving, or spiteful, but given the imagery, the rain, and the fact that the words burned, it sounds like they were angry words
I like the way you set the tone with the imagery and symbolism.
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Wow. This is kind of sexy and I am not sure it was meant to be. The last line is my favorite.
I get imagines of foggy windows on a cold, winter night.
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