She said; I realize now,
I wasn’t happy then, unless
I was sad.
I guess that’s why I stayed,
let you abuse me the way you did,
long after the marriage was over.
And I should’ve told her
I was sorry for that time.
That was just me, fueled by drugs
& alcohol abuse,
but I was so damn afraid.
She might wanna come back!
A contest entry
- Chuck Palahniuk-- one by birch.
300 points, ended February 12, 2008, 6 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Give me your 100th poem by Loveandblessings2u.
975 points, ended March 16, 2008, 33 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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the opening is great,
a powerful write,
full of emotion.
good luck in the contest.
loveandblessings2u & yours always
Joyce
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I really liked this one... the first stanza was my favorite... but the end of the last stanza was very powerful... interesting write
Keep writing
Polly
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i'm glad i'm judging this contest when i am, because it's become all the more relevant to me in the past few days. the first stanza is my prefered one, as i can relate to some times having the desire to be sad. usually it's so that i may find myself with worthy, interesting poetry.
that's quite possibly a character flaw. i enjoyed the thought.
justin -
I like this one, my friend--especially the kicker in the tail! That last line is unexpected and humorous, but it also reflects the ambivalence of human relationships.
Bill
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